Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Over the past decades, the issue of whether children should learn financial responsibility among their young age has received a great deal of attention from parents and psychologists. Although some may argue that exposing children to manage their own money can be stressful, I as well as many others believe that educating children to manage their own money as young age could learn to know the value of money and might bloomed their talent in businesses. I am of the opinion that both of the mentioned viewpoints have their own merits and drawbacks, and the following explanations will further elaborate on this perspective.
First and foremost, beyond the shadow of the doubt, throughout the history money has played a crucial role in people’s life. As the culture evolves, the parents have got more concerned about educating children to learn the value of the money. Getting a specific amount of money each month to the children, parents can satisfy their concern. By doing this, children can learn to spend money on a specified amount and will know the value of the money. He or she understands they can just spend their money on specific stuff. for the purpose of the illustration, I have a cousin who is 8 years old and has been received a specific determined quantity of money each month. She manages every month which doll or toy she could buy and she doesn’t waste her money on unnecessary commodities.
Furthermore, it is established beyond doubt that talent is a matter which should be discovered and developed. Children who have to face to responsible for their own money might be able to learn how to get more money in the future. According to the research conducted by an American psychology institute, children who become familiar with managing money on their own childhood will be more successful in their future due to the fact that they investigate and estimate plenty of solutions which bring them more money. As a result, they can find their talent in business or other majors.
On the other hand, it is occasionally said that subjecting children at a young age in controlling their money could be harmful to their spirits. Some people stated that childhood should not be combined with adulthood circumstances. Children should have their sweet childhood and should not be involved with financial responsibility and its stresses. This issue has been bone of contention over the past decades.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one can draw the conclusion that educating children on financial responsibility is a great issue due to the understanding the value of money and finding their talents on increasing their income on future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 529, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, may, so, well, in brief, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2252.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0606741573 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86584614151 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465168539326 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.809843307 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.526315789 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4210526316 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78947368421 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370827303002 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119756597612 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848070739843 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226696914253 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0796580996452 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21 Out of 30
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