Most people believe money is a very important consideration when choosing a job as it can help you get a better lifestyle; However,there are some who believe it is more important to have a job you enjoy and that this,and a more balanced personal life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The issue of whether it is better to choose a job considering money more important than joy is a very controversial one. On one hand, supporters of the idea that joy is most important belief that an enjoyable job brings balance to your personal life and gives more satisfaction to others. On the other hand, critics of this, maintain that money is a very important factor when choosing a job. However, after a very careful consideration, I maintain the opinion that is better to choose a job that I enjoy rather than choose a job only for money.
To begin with, a enjoyable job brings balance to my personal life, which is very important in order to give the best attention to my customers. I work in a pharmacy as pharmacy technician, my work require an extensive attention to the patients. For example, people go to the pharmacy in order to receive medicines to release their pain or sickness. I enjoy very much my work because after every patient finish short travel through the pharmacy I always receive in immediately feed back, my best gift are thanks words. Such enjoyable work let me delight my personal life at home. I never complained about the long ten hours that I have to work daily. I will encourage my daughter to become a pharmacy technician like me because that is a kindly profession. There are not doubt that taking a good time in a job is very beneficial for our personal life.
On the other hand, a job chosen to consider money as the most important factor do not give pleasure to me and even to others. If a have to go to work every day to a place where I am not going to be comfortable at all, I will consider this as a failure in my personal and professional life. Money could give me a balanced personal life but it does not mean that it could give me joy in my job. Talking about my job as a pharmacy technician again, money would not make me feel happy and as a result I would not give my patients the best attention and care they deserve. I do not like to help patients just because I am thinking in my pay day check. As a result, money is not the best criteria to follow choosing a job.
In sum, although some people choose a job for money in order to have a more balanced personal life I believe that joy is the principal standard to follow choosing a job. Enjoyable jobs bring people happiness to their life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, for example, talking about, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39220183486 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56228180827 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.419724770642 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.068241578 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.75 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.5376344086 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344513937208 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124965463015 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1004326253 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263150827717 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123374972097 0.0645574589148 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.71 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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