You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks.
Which country would you like to visit? Use specific reasons and details
Generally speaking a travel all around the world would be very interested. People on developed countries like to visit wealthy and paradise spots. On the other hand, there is just a few minority that prefer to go to visit ancient civilizations because they can learn more about historical events in the past and enjoy the experience. I maintain the opinion that I prefer to visit a country with a ancient civilization like China for two important reasons.
To begin with, China civilization began in 2000 BC there are several important historical events that bring my attraction. I feel very attracted about China's culture, I believe that this ancient civilization has many things to show to western culture. My first interest about this culture data when I was in middle school and my history teacher explains us multiple facts about the Great Chinese Wall. Intruders, invaders and political interests made China emperor take the decision to build the wall. For long an object of fascination for foreigners like me, the wall is now a national symbol of China and a popular tourist destination.
In addition, a travel to China would let me enjoy an amazing experience that I will never forget. China culture is an attraction for people on the other side of the world. For example, since my history teacher in middle school pushed me to look more closer China civilization I wish to travel over there. Last year my friend Eva took a traveler package to China a little bit expensive but was worthy. She brought me magazines, brochures and pictures which gave me more information about Chinese restaurants, theaters, beaches and touristic places. Gardens surrounded for humongous falls were the most beautiful view that I have ever seen in my life. Definitively I will plan a travel to China next year.
In conclusion, although some people prefer travel to wealthy and fancy tourists destination, I prefer travel to visit ancient civilizations like China.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, so, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1633.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02461538462 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75122350405 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575384615385 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2594416557 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0588235294 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1176470588 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.29411764706 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13643716602 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516651408452 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702070909186 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0969333717442 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754945547936 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.