Vaccination for flu was tried on the women of a large town in the countryside in the month of June during the year 1996 on an experimental basis. The bar chart indicates deaths from flu of the natives from March to August. The table illustrates the percentage of females who are at a maximum risk, out of those who were given vaccination. The lines on the third graph depict the number of death cases filed based on gender for a period of 11 months from February to December.
To begin with, the death of only one female from flu was reported before the experiment was conducted. This rose to a maximum of four during two months after June. As compared to this, only two males died during this period from June to August as a result of this epidemic.
Secondly, the table shows that the vaccine was given to only the females who were at a maximum risk from the disease, out of which 28% did not take part in the trial. Out of them, the majority were senior citizens aged 65 or above at 35%, followed by babies or young children at 24% and the least were those who were hospitalized at only 13% of the total.
From the line graph, it can be clearly seen that the experiment had remarkable results with the female death rate decreasing from a maximum of 3500 in June to 2500 in September and levelling after that. Similar sort of positive outcome was obtained for the males, however, their figures were a little less as compared to their female counterparts.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 340, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Line 7, column 307, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...wever, their figures were a little less as compared to their female counterparts. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, second, secondly, so, third, sort of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 33.7804878049 166% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1201.0 965.302439024 124% => OK
No of words: 267.0 196.424390244 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49812734082 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38123323321 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 106.607317073 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546816479401 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 380.7 283.868780488 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1594768421 43.030603864 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.181818182 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2727272727 22.9334400587 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63636363636 5.23603664747 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.13902439024 615% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146288367481 0.215688989381 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670132831792 0.103423049105 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0837056345157 0.0843802449381 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0912227303587 0.15604864568 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459675579091 0.0819641961636 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.2329268293 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 11.4140731707 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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