our family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. In the letter:•explain why you would like your son to attend this school•describe his past academic achievements•desc

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our family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. In the letter:
• explain why you would like your son to attend this school
• describe his past academic achievements
• describe his current interests

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inquire about the admission criteria in your school as I seek an institute with good curriculum for my child.

My family will soon relocate to Brampton because my husband has been promoted in his current organization. I am keen to admit my child in your learning center as it is located at a 10 minutes distance from my new residence and has a strong reputation in the society.

Fortunately, my child is a scholar in math’s and has attained success in various competitions. In addition, he is a national level swimmer and he had represented his school in Olympics.

At the moment he is passionate about indoor sports because of which he is pursuing training in table tennis and chess. Moreover, he has recently developed a taste to learn algorithms as well as quick maths. Hence, I feel he will be a value addition to your school because of his talent and dedication.

I look forward to seeing your positive response.

Yours faithfully,
Jessica ayri

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 153, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to center'
Suggestion: to center
...keen to admit my child in your learning center as it is located at a 10 minutes distan...
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Line 9, column 184, Rule ID: LEARN_NNNNS_ON_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to'?
Suggestion: to
...y developed a taste to learn algorithms as well as quick maths. Hence, I feel he w...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, look, moreover, so, well, i feel, in addition, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 840.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 173.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85549132948 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87380335064 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 127.690721649 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.635838150289 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 259.2 290.88556701 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1172466651 44.8134815571 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0 76.5299724578 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3 16.8248392259 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 4.34317383033 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132890237352 0.216113520407 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566734716413 0.0766984524023 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464736626194 0.0603063233224 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0713048968872 0.12726935374 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0180298700432 0.0580467560999 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 8.37731958763 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 8.71597938144 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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