Although most students at universities are inclined to do sports, there is not enough equipment in some universities. So, in my opinion, universities should pay attention to their students' sports activities as much as their libraries, and they should spend equal money on them. Because, many students study in fields like physiology which are related to sports, and exercises are essential for students' health, and many students do not have enough money.
Firstly, there are a sundry of study fields which are associated with sports. To be more specific, nowadays, athletism is a major of study and it is learned at the university. Providing sports training equipment and building sports complexes for students need a lot of money. The universities should use a proportion of their budget to do these essential tasks. For example, the university where I study has a big basketball court which is suitable for other kinds of sports like futsal. Consequently, many courses are taken at that court.
Secondly, students' health is as important as their success in lessons. Of course, libraries are the places that students do experiments and learn about science. However, sports activities help them to have robust bodies. It is difficult to live without a healthy body and to use what you have learned as a piece of knowledge.
Finally, most students do not work besides study at the university. Although they are in interests with sports, they do not have enough money to enroll in a gym. If the university finances their sports exercises, the students will be more convenient and thankful. For example, I have a friend who studies civil engineering and he is a fan of swimming. He uses the university's pool to do his swimming training. Of course, there are a lot of pools out of the university, but, unlike the pool of the university, none of them is free.
In conclusion, I agree that universities ought to give an equal amount of money to their students' sports activities in comparison with the money they give to libraries. Sports lessons are fields of study in many universities, students should be healthy, and most students do not have enough money to do sports activities out of the university.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1837.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9783197832 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84425058415 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.449864498645 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4440171692 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4761904762 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5714285714 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370594638564 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116264771352 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117636489551 0.0737576698707 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238830884441 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109497850027 0.0645574589148 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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