Even though doctors all over the world agree that fast food is bad for people's health, more and more people are eating it. Why are more people eating fast food? What can be done about this problem? (Rewrite)

Fast food has been prevalent since last century. However, eating fast food would take a heavy toll on human health. Although many doctors around the world are firmly consent that fast food is unhealthy to people’s health, the number of people eating it is on the rise. In the following essays, I would elaborate certain reasons for this serious situation and provide some viable solutions to it.

First and foremost, fast food is convenient for people. Having fast food for dinner or lunch often saves great amount of time for people who are swamped with work. Hence, people who are overwhelmed by the massive workload could have sufficient time to finish their daily tasks. A case in point is that many employees in Taiwan have a tendency of having “McDonald’s” for dinner. As a result, people opt the fast food for meals in order to save their time for working.

In addition to saving time, another reason for increasing number of people having fast food is rooted in the prevailing advertisement. The adverts often convey the tempting message for the consumer in order to attract more population. To demonstrate, the dynamic adverts of “KFC” broadcasted on the television show appealing image of the fast food, and inform viewers on the promotion of discount recently. In this case, people succumb to the temptation of adverts and therefore, deciding to enjoy the fast food.

To remedy this problem, it is imperative that the authorities should impose the tax on the unhealthy food such as French fries and fried chicken. Moreover, the government should strictly curtail the number of advertisements of the fast food to preventing more and more people from being tempted.

By way of conclusion, as argued above, even though eating fast food brings advantage for people such as saving valuable time, it is of vitally importance that the government should curb the rising number of people having fast food by effective measures as far as health is concerned.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 167, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'consented'.
Suggestion: consented
...any doctors around the world are firmly consent that fast food is unhealthy to people&a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, moreover, so, therefore, in addition, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1676.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10975609756 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90238137881 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533536585366 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4688844663 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.75 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0625 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.471349413701 0.244688304435 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16575357694 0.084324248473 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0890945960751 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280874929423 0.151304729494 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404126804792 0.056905535591 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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