Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Governments have the responsibility to properly distributed their money into all kinds of things to properly allow distribution of funds into all kinds of projects,, such as arts and athletics. A controversial argument can be whether the governments should spend more money in support of the arts or in support of athletics such as state-sponsored olympic teams. Personally speaking, I think governments should spend more money in athletics.
firstly, arts can be enjoyable which bring more joy to an individual’s live. However, sports can be more popular among people. Put my own consideration,I think arts are appreciated by few people compared to majority number of sports lovers. Nowadays, people just prefer watching a football game instead of going to a music theater. And with so many lovers from sports, I think governments should put quite a big attention on supporting big athletics such as state-sponsored olympic games. It will surely bring governments a promising profit and at the same time, people can enjoy their times while watching games.
Secondly, sports games such as olympic games are world-wide, by holding such big events, governments can earn their status among the whole world. What’s more, governments must put a considerable money in building infrastructures, in this way a country’s economy can be boosted. A large number of foreign investors may show their interests to invest their money on some projects and governments can also lower the rate of unemployment. Take China as example, in 2008, China hold olympic games in Beijing. As result, China got all the attention from all over the world, it turns out as a result ,more foreign visitors (come) to China, more investors (are) willing to invest their money in China. (Therefore), China economy reached a brand-new climax in next few years (that should )thanks to olympic games.
In conclusion, arts do play an important role in people’s lives, but governments should focus more on sports because it will bring more benefits both on international status and domesticated economy.
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- TPO-45 Integrated Writing Task 3
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- TPO-45 Integrated Writing Task 14
- Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. 80
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 5.04856512141 317% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 12.0772626932 17% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 1373.03311258 128% => OK
No of words: 331.0 270.72406181 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30513595166 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10546391615 2.5805825403 120% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534743202417 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 419.366225166 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.818894506 49.2860985944 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.75 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6875 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8125 7.06452816374 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394784599238 0.272083759551 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134203350414 0.0996497079465 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.175691856761 0.0662205650399 265% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254512947023 0.162205337803 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.16092600936 0.0443174109184 363% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.3589403974 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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