A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The given argument provided by the author is flawed due to numerous valid reasons which weakens the argument to the root. Primarily, author makes the wrong implication of Himalayan children and suburban children that dental care is not helpful to prevent tooth decay, as there can be numerous reasons for this. Author also heavily relied on the study that was performed but provide no real stats and information about the study.
Firstly, author makes a wrong implication that regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay since Himalayan children have no tooth decay and they receive no dental care then suburban children that receive dental care and still have high rate of tooth decay. There can be numerous reasons of why children of suburban have high rate of tooth decay, but making this assumption out of the giving context is a fallacy and it can not be considered right.
Secondly, There can be many reasons of why Himalayan children have less tooth decay then suburban children. Diet plays vital role for this, there can be a case where suburban people consumes more sweet items then Himalayan people, and since sweet products are major cause of tooth decay so suburban children have high rate of tooth decay. Living lifestyle and food consumption are the major cause of tooth decay. It can be a case since Himalayan people are more inclined towards natural things. they may use some sort of paste that might help there tooth to be stronger. The climate and pollution difference can also be a big factor of this reason.
Lastly, in the given argument author relies completely on the study that was performed on suburban and Himalayan children, but author doesn't provide the stats of how many children were being involved in this study, does the lifestyle of the children that were brought under study was same, or does they have similar eating habits. If all this information be provided the argument would be much more stronger and easily defended. Even if these facts are brought under consideration we can not have a similar environment as suburban area of United State would be much more polluted and warm then Himalayan region of Nepal which would be much cleaner and cold. These climate factor and also play a big role in tooth decay issue.
All the points that involve details of the study that was performed and on the basis of which author derived a conclusion was not provided. The fallacy that author made and not considering the climate, lifestyle and eating order difference of the people of both the regions makes the argument weak.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2101 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.786 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.294 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.438 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.445 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.378 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.601 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.141 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 85, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...imalayan children have less tooth decay then suburban children. Diet plays vital rol...
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Line 5, column 209, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...burban people consumes more sweet items then Himalayan people, and since sweet produ...
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Line 5, column 496, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...e more inclined towards natural things. they may use some sort of paste that might h...
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Line 7, column 135, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...rban and Himalayan children, but author doesnt provide the stats of how many children ...
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Line 7, column 294, Rule ID: DOES_YOU[2]
Message: Did you mean 'do'? 'does' is only used for the third person singular (he/she/it).
Suggestion: do
...t were brought under study was same, or does they have similar eating habits. If all...
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Line 7, column 395, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
... be provided the argument would be much more stronger and easily defended. Even if these fact...
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Line 7, column 659, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this climate' or 'These climates'?
Suggestion: This climate; These climates
...l which would be much cleaner and cold. These climate factor and also play a big role in toot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2146.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 438.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.899543379 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33387835542 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.41095890411 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 670.5 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.0661249396 57.8364921388 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.235294118 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7647058824 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05882352941 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265909258751 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927744184974 0.0743258471296 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752317312951 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151891782498 0.128457276422 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581848837842 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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