The chart below shows male and female fitness membership between 1970 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The chart below shows male and female fitness membership between 1970 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The mention bar chart describe the proportion fitness membership between 1970 and 2000. The major categories are illustrated as the number of the male and female as member of fitness. In general, it can be seen it is clear that the both of men and women who were recorded as fitness member, had a fluctuation time by time.
In 1970, fitness membership was consisted of about 1000 women which was lower than 2000 men. There were a growth of both women and men to 2000 and 4000 respectively in 1975. Despite it decreased slightly in 1980, it climbed again in the next five years to about 2500 men. While, the women member of the fitness rose gradually from almost 2000 in 1980 to almost 3000 in 1985 . A number of men and women as members was about 2000 every gender which reduced moderately together from 1985 to 1990. The total of men and women as member increased between 1990 and 1995. Male member of fitness declined sharply from 5000 in 1995 to 1000 in 2000. In addition, female member of fitness amounted almost 3000 in 1995 and fell gradually to 2000 in 2000. The greatest of men of fitness member was in year 1995, while the highest of women as fitness member was in year 1985 and 1995.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 272, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the next five years to about 2500 men. While, the women member of the fitness rose g...
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Line 2, column 373, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...most 2000 in 1980 to almost 3000 in 1985 . A number of men and women as members wa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
while, in addition, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 978.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 218.0 196.424390244 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48623853211 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84250218741 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2535067738 2.65546596893 85% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47247706422 0.547539520022 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 271.8 283.868780488 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 19.8932917225 43.030603864 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.5 112.824112599 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 22.9334400587 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.23603664747 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 3.70975609756 270% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162388648138 0.215688989381 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083390937918 0.103423049105 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724450047387 0.0843802449381 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157619876191 0.15604864568 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330717447937 0.0819641961636 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.2329268293 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 87.05 61.2550243902 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.3012195122 54% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 11.4140731707 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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