Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to visit museums in order to learn about a country.
Some people think that it is not important to visit museums in order to learn about a country because museums provides old artifacts and mainly focus on the history centuries ago. Those who are opposed to the idea often insist that it is better to meet the people in the country rather than to visit a museum. However, I have a different idea. I am of the opinion that museums play an important role in understanding a country. Two reasons are presented as follows:
First and foremost, a museum gives its visitors an overview of the country's history. In other words, people can see how the country has transformed over the decades. It is very helpful because many current affairs of the country are derived from its history. For instance, the ongoing conflicts between Korea and Japan are related to the invasion and violence of Japan in 1900s. Therefore, it is crucial to learn the history if a person wants to know the diplomatic policies of Korea toward Japan, and there are many museums in Korea which display the records of Korea at that time.
Secondly, museums possess authentic artifacts. Compared to the other way of learning about a country, museums are one of the most reliable sources of the information because the artifacts and records held in a museum are verified by many experts such as historians and archaeologists. According to an experiment conducted by Korean history research center, the students who studied Korean history on the Internet scored ten points less than the other students who went to museums to prepare the exam. The research center concludes that it is very dangerous to adopt the knowledge from the Internet or people without special licenses.
In a nutshell, I agree that it is important to visit museums so as to learn about a country because they offer well-organized history information and it is highly reliable.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, as to, for instance, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1546.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89240506329 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66062279093 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518987341772 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2962076176 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.428571429 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78571428571 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0293105534556 0.236089414692 12% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0106247868276 0.076458572812 14% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0148157360463 0.0737576698707 20% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0212298620733 0.150856017488 14% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00844629943366 0.0645574589148 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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