Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
"Human beings are members of a whole in a creation one essence and soul" this is a poem from a person poet whose name is Saadi. Actually, people attitude towards extended family issue is varied from person to person. Although many would argue that the big family is not the most important factor in character building and does not impact for members of the family in our country, In my opinion, extended family has a far greater impact. I would suggest two reasons based on the my general fact to support the argument.
The first aspect to point out is that many benefits quickly stem from big family. Admittedly, grandparents and uncles are great teachers to build characters beside the parents. I would like to mention noteworthy researched conducted by CSR institute in India. the discovered result suggest that Seventy-Five Percent of the families indulge themselves in right behavior to teach other persons in the family to be one member. For instance, I remember when I was in high school, usually my father has been traveling a business trip far away from home and I have not anyone helped me to study well. Furthermore, I went to my uncle to supported me in my study due to he become the second father as they say in my country.
Secondly, there has been a positive correlation between relatives and the success of children. I still affirm the same idea because there is no guarantee that a big family contributes to widening young people horizon, which will influence profoundly on a family. my own experience is a compelling example of this, every year my grandparents make a family conference to discuss everything in the world such as the economy, politics, and also sport, etc..Moreover, while this conversation between adults, the young generation learns a lot of things around worldwide, and they are aware many things in their life which are helped them in their career and family life. I need to mention a proverb in my country, that said, "likewise nuts that need dirt environment to grow, the extended family are vital for growing and becoming valuable family to be effect on the society".
To draw a conclusion, taking what I have mentioned above, I strongly believe that the big family has a close tie-in motivation and creativity for other members.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, if, likewise, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for instance, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9383033419 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78748599605 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568123393316 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.9039485371 48.9658058833 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.066666667 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9333333333 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53333333333 5.45110844103 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105108899233 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0340580961729 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0276637308591 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0620179206824 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0276536961526 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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