the table below show the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980..Write a report for university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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the table below show the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980..
Write a report for university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The pie chart compares of imprisonment in Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand, United States and Canada 1930 to 1980. Overall, it can be seen that, the higher rules of lookup in US and Canada. Data is fluctuated. Decide from Britain had lower imprisonment but steadily peak.
Beginning in Britain 1930 witnessed a gradual rise in the number of penitentiary around 29 to 83 in 1980. Moved in Australia countries between 1940-1960 slammer at a fairly similar level between round 45 until 50, and amount of cage and 1940 to 1950 the value of circa 54. Then, both 1960 to 1970 prison in New Zealand remained constant of around 62. which the last year rose amount of 84. Between in 1930 to 1940 there was plunged of deviation to point 50. In the next year, had a slight a dip total of 50 to 48. The C in New Zealand, Australia and Great Britain had stay constant at 54 in 1970.
in contrast, US in 1930 stood at 100 and grown gradual of 130 in 1940. Over following three years, there was fall to 95. Although, in 1980 reach a though of 130. The last Canada which in 1940 climb of 125 from 100. Then hit a low of 82 in 1970. Accompaniment next year napped climb steadily at 90. Both 1940 and 1960 in 5 nations which have a similar pattern of detention.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 352, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Which
...Zealand remained constant of around 62. which the last year rose amount of 84. Betwee...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 352, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...Zealand remained constant of around 62. which the last year rose amount of 84. Betwee...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 569, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'staid', 'stayed'.
Suggestion: staid; stayed
...ealand, Australia and Great Britain had stay constant at 54 in 1970. in contrast, U...
^^^^
Line 2, column 569, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'staid', 'stayed'.
Suggestion: staid; stayed
...ealand, Australia and Great Britain had stay constant at 54 in 1970. in contrast, U...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...itain had stay constant at 54 in 1970. in contrast, US in 1930 stood at 100 and g...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, look, so, then, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 33.7804878049 160% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1020.0 965.302439024 106% => OK
No of words: 233.0 196.424390244 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.37768240343 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4205323705 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 106.607317073 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579399141631 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 267.3 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.1 1.45097560976 76% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 8.94146341463 201% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 12.0 22.4926829268 53% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8490202641 43.030603864 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 56.6666666667 112.824112599 50% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.9444444444 22.9334400587 56% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.77777777778 5.23603664747 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.079070411134 0.215688989381 37% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0232691205603 0.103423049105 22% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0315683901276 0.0843802449381 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0551774470746 0.15604864568 35% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0207860951243 0.0819641961636 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.7 13.2329268293 43% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 101.59 61.2550243902 166% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 2.1 10.3012195122 20% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.24 11.4140731707 63% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.9970731707 62% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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