Countries(where there is high unemployment)most pupils should be offered only primary education, there is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Education is vitally essential for every individual in terms of various aspects. Most people undergo from rudimentary schooling to higher education in order to pave the way for better career. However, it is often argued that students should only be offered to attend primary school rather than secondary education because there is high rate of unemployment. In my view, I completely disagree with that.

It is fundamental for every pupil to engage in secondary schooling due to the fact that the secondary schools impart the students more important things other than the knowledge or expertise. On one hand, the educators instruct the moral and ethic to students, which could cultivate their decent personality. To demonstrate, the speech with regard to the moral in the society and between the peers are being held once a week in junior high schools in Taiwan. On the other hand, the pupils could nourish their temperament in terms of the arts by the aesthetic program provided by schools. For instance, fine arts courses and aesthetic appreciation is compulsory in the senior high school in Taiwan. Hence, attending to secondary schooling is pivotal.

Apart from that, secondary education also cultivate students' social skills, which is favorable to students in terms of their prospect job career. Social ability is one of the indispensable capacity in the working place. Students could acquire and foster their capability in socializing with their peers in the secondary schools. A case in point is that the pupils interact and communicate with other classmates and peers from different background and characteristics on a daily basis. In this way, the could foster sufficient ability of interaction. As a result, to participate in secondary schooling is conducive to students.

All in all,, I am convinced that it is paramount to have secondary education because it is beneficial to every pupil, although there is a substantial unemployed scenario in the society.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, second, so, apart from, for instance, as a result, in my view, with regard to, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1662.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27619047619 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89780587886 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520634920635 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1961654226 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7647058824 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5294117647 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17647058824 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158368776255 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483953638893 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483181938223 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105587935369 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0438210332766 0.056905535591 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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