how do the television and movies affect people's life
television is a big influence on people's life nowadays. we spend lots of our free time one the movie and programs in television. unfortunately I think that usually television effects people behavior and life negatively. I feel this way for two important reasons, which I explore in the following essay.
First, according to the records and scientific experiences, by inventing the TV, people's physical activity has been drop increasingly. people and mostly young children prefer to spend their free time watching programs and talk show rather that playing outside with their friends, which would be harmful for their health. For example, when I was about ten years old, we did not have TV in our house and because of that, I used to play outside of my house, in the streets with my friend. we played different games like football and running. but after a year, my father bought a tv for home. At first, I did not watch program and movie a lot but after a while, TV seemed more attractive for me. Due to that, I watched tv more that 4 or 5 hours a day and stopped playing out side. month later, my weight increased and I could not practice well during the sport time in school, while my classmate did it easily. not only I got fat, also I lost my ability of being active and it really affected my physical health. due to my experience, I feel like the influence of tv is actually negative on people.
Second, many programs and movies have an bad effects on young adult and especially teenagers. you can see in the tv and movie that the heroes usually smoke, have gun and kill people. they violate the social rules and sometimes do lots of dangerous thing it dose not have any consequences for them. it cause harmful effects on teenagers who imitate their favorite hero in real life. For example, my brother was so addicted to spider-man movies. his rood decorate was all covered by his favorite hero and he tried to act like him and jump around the house every time. once, when he was in school, he tried to jump from his deck to another one. unfortunately, he was't able to fly, which he thought he could and by doing that, not only he hurt himself and some other students, but also manager fired my brother for two weeks. as a result, my brother's score decreased that year. so this is another disadvantages of tv and movie on people's life.
In sum, tv and movie have both advantages and disadvantages on people. but I think that the harmful effects overweight the beneficial advantages. tv and program have reduced the amount of the people's activity and also influence teenagers and young children in a bad way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, really, second, so, well, while, for example, i feel, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 13.8261648746 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2147.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58760683761 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54043474922 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517094017094 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.826922519 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.5185185185 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92592592593 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 30.0 5.5376344086 542% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153588537086 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493423984472 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733761036071 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116062297986 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0761381467027 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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