In a world full of technological advancement , it is difficult to debate whether one should encourage the upcoming generation to expose themselves to this growing world of technology or not. Some people may be of the opinion , that children may undergo wrong influence of this technology and should therefore be kept away from technologies like mobile phones and computers, while others may argue that , the world needs young minds to be well oriented with the upcoming age of technological marvels as they are the pioneers of the future. I prefer the latter and i believe so because of the following reasons.
Firstly, technology would provide children all the tools they need to unfold their imagination. Creativity stems from ones imagination and inventions like mobile phones and laptops have paved a way to channel this imagination in productive way. For example, i have a cousin studying in the primary school and he had been introduced to using mobiles and laptops at a very young age.while helping him out on his project on solar system, i was surprised to know how much he knew about the planets , their role in the solar system, as he used the internet to learn things in a manner way different from conventional book learning . In fact, he had come up with ideas to make 3-D models for his project just using the aid of certain software and videos on his laptop. In contrast , I did not have such technology in the past, to help us think out of the box , instead we had limited options and resources such as books , newspapers and television. Thus , technology would help shape a pattern of thinking creatively and productively.
Secondly, technology will help bring out the creators of the future by presenting opportunities to those seeking career in this field.For example, when i was growing up, i was interested in fine arts , which comprised of skillful sketching and creating colorful illustrations using paints and brushes . But later on, as i started using certain electronic tools for animation and electronic tracing equipment for sketching , i realized that i could do much more with my capabilities as an artist and even more as an illustrator. It enabled me to sketch much effectively thereby making my work stand out amongst others and i was highly appreciated for my work. In a way, technology has changed the way a person can approach a task.
To sum up, technology has revolutionized the way we approach tasks not only by providing gadgets such as computers and mobile phones that has helped new ways to channel creativity but also has opened new doors for creators of the future. Thus , it would help children have a creative edge in their thinking as well as in their careers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for example, in contrast, in fact, such as, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2245.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89106753813 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83621718924 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542483660131 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.3247484799 48.9658058833 199% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.666666667 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6 20.6045352989 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 5.45110844103 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 26.0 5.5376344086 470% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115287638497 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440136089913 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0294241641158 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0705670474057 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0232628690751 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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