Viewing through the human beings' history, there are so many heroes ,who made great contributions to people ,remembered by us. Whether their reputation is diminished depeneds on how specific we examine it. Even if no one is perfect at all, they were and they are still heroes, who helped us, lead us, guide us in the history and at present. We can not forget what they have done for us while there maybe some flaws about them.
To begin with, Let's talk about the chinese leader, chairman Mao Zedong. He led the CCP to assebly troops to fight against foreign invasion to our homeland. In the end, China had been liberated as an independent country. While after the success of establishing the new country, he began to expel the cabinet who not agree with hime , then there was the famous Cultural Revolution in 1970s, which had made China a great deterioration for 10 years. Even so, compared with his contribution to the whole nation, in the present, we still commemorate him as the leader of China, who made China free of war. He made mistakes while he was still the father of new China as Abraham Lincoln.
Another point I want to address is that the heroes often silent while when they were making progress. After the celebration , they are under the focus light to be examined carefully. Due to the development of the Media, we can see there are a lot of news about these heroes who were once famous while infamed by some influence. When I was young, our chiness children remembered a name Zhang Haidi, a disabled female writer who encourage people to strggle for life. Recently, I watched the news that this needed lady with broken legs were on the meeting of Chineses congress, fashion clothes and luxrious wheel chair, like a billionare. Shared with lots of friends' idea in common, we all found she has changed. Once she was the heroin in Chinese, now like a celebrity on the stage, prenteding the others fogot what she was. Thanks to the media, we can see through a person.
While I do not want to be pessimistic that there is no hero at present day.On the contrary, I believe that, one person who we consider he/she is a hero is because of the contributon that he/she makes, as I discussed the chairman Mao previously, I want to assume that, we should remember and be thankful for the things done by them while not being curious about the other stuff inside their private life, as there are so many people in the world ,we all can contribute to the society in our own way. The heroic behaivor is what we are chasing for.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
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Line 1, column 67, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...beings history, there are so many heroes ,who made great contributions to people ,...
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Suggestion: ,
... ,who made great contributions to people ,remembered by us. Whether their reputati...
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Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...tributions to people ,remembered by us. Whether their reputation is diminished depeneds...
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Suggestion: ,
...xpel the cabinet who not agree with hime , then there was the famous Cultural Revo...
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Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1970s'.
Suggestion: in the 1970s
...here was the famous Cultural Revolution in 1970s, which had made China a great deteriora...
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...e making progress. After the celebration , they are under the focus light to be ex...
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... media, we can see through a person. While I do not want to be pessimistic that th...
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...ic that there is no hero at present day.On the contrary, I believe that, one perso...
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Suggestion: ,
...as there are so many people in the world ,we all can contribute to the society in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, still, then, while, even so, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 33.0505617978 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2083.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 455.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57802197802 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4080045655 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558241758242 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 95.9901557453 60.3974514979 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.15 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112535884648 0.243740707755 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.032567967928 0.0831039109588 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0316748925686 0.0758088955206 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0747643743287 0.150359130593 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032466811841 0.0667264976115 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 12.1639044944 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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