Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that through a quick look at the history of human life, we find out that without people who have the venture of taking a risk and examine new things we could not obtain any of today's developments in science and technology. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that taking rise does not make sense because through enough measurement and study on the problem we would be able to do it without any concern. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that successful people try new things and take risks rather only doing what they know how to do well.
First and foremost, testing a new invention always contain some percents of risk. For example, a new drug for the treatment of cancer, even after this drug passes several animal and experimental tests, would be risky in the first injection on human volunteers. In spite of this fact, we cannot stop to discovery and examine new drugs and treatments because of the presence of some degree of failure and dangerous happens on it. Without these risks progress in medicine will not be possible.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that sometimes accepting some percent of risk put a person above of others opponents. For instance, I am a stockbroker in the national bank, and I have an older and very professional co-worker he earns the highest profit in his business than all of us. The main difference which is made him a phenomenon is that he sees the golden opportunities and takes advantage of it whenever it was along with high risk. However, all other ones preferred to be more careful and do not involve in venture trades.
Finally, yet importantly, in some cases, there is not any safe way to do the job. For example, a firefighter is completely aware of high dangers in a firing building. Notwithstanding, he goes into the fire without consideration about his life. Hitherto, they have saved a lot of individuals in this way that lead to they are particularly respected by societies because of their courage.
On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that successful people try new things and take risks. Because testing new ideas required some degrees of risk-taking and risk is a necessary element for success in business, and some types of occupations are joined with risks.
- TPO 39 - integrated writing 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 61
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 83
- T P O 53 3
- TPO 39 - Independent taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 31, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'invention'.
Suggestion: invention
... well. First and foremost, testing a new invention always contain some percents of risk. F...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, look, so, still, well, for example, for instance, in some cases, in spite of, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1967.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82107843137 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71144351627 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561274509804 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7920382386 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.705882353 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.29411764706 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339000701178 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0995824626295 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154433493439 0.0737576698707 209% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169310188686 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130867094327 0.0645574589148 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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