The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of west lansburg. ancient record suggests that the tufted groundhog once were numbered in the millions. since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the western coastland has been prohibited . now local development interests are lobbying for the west lansburg council to allow an access road to be built along the edge of westlands. neighboring eastern carpentia , which had similar sanctuaries ,has been its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. in order to preserve the region's biodiversity and a healthy environment ,the west lansburg council should not allow the road to be built.
The author in this argument concludes that ,the west lansburg council should not allow the road to be built on the grounds of preserving biodiversity and healthy environment of region.The author presents the conclusion without any effective support.There are two major flaws in the argument.
Firsly,the argument specifies a causal relationship between development of road and maintaining biodiversity. Author states that building a road will affect the biodiversity of region,but author fails to give any such support or explanation that how the road on the edge of wetlands will affect the biodiversity and also the healthy environment of region.
In addition,author also uses an inadequate example of neighbouring eastern carpentia where the population of sea otter has declined since repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. Author fails to provide any evidences for the road that had been built in eastern carpentia and which had affected the population of sea otters. There can be many factors which had affected the population of sea otters in eastern carpentia, so the example of sea otter's decline in population cannot be taken as support for not building road to the edge of wetlands.
In sum; the conclusion of not building a road on wetlands cannot be reasonably drawn from the author's reasoning. The reasoning is not adequately explained and there's irrelevant example without proper support. The author could strengthen the argument by giving in depth evidences of how road will affect the biodiversity of region and for making argument more acceptable ,how road in other sanctuaries had affected their biodiversity and healthy environment.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 265 350
No. of Characters: 1375 1500
No. of Different Words: 122 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.035 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.189 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.846 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.88 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.456 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.456 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.147 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 265 350
No. of Characters: 1375 1500
No. of Different Words: 122 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.035 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.189 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.846 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.88 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.456 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.456 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.147 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e author in this argument concludes that ,the west lansburg council should not all...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...rsity and healthy environment of region.The author presents the conclusion without ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
...onclusion without any effective support.There are two major flaws in the argument. F...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...two major flaws in the argument. Firsly,the argument specifies a causal relationshi...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , but
...d will affect the biodiversity of region,but author fails to give any such support o...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , author
...lthy environment of region. In addition,author also uses an inadequate example of neig...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pulation of sea otter has declined since repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...asoning is not adequately explained and theres irrelevant example without proper suppo...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... and for making argument more acceptable ,how road in other sanctuaries had affect...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.6327345309 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 28.8173652695 24% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1396.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 260.0 441.139720559 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36923076923 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02861110199 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 204.123752495 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503846153846 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 705.55239521 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.4176223436 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.111111111 119.503703932 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8888888889 23.324526521 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.031767973731 0.218282227539 15% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0169580215785 0.0743258471296 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.014052160679 0.0701772020484 20% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0231500416344 0.128457276422 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.005203281339 0.0628817314937 8% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 14.3799401198 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 48.3550499002 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.46 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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