Do you agree or disagree? These days children spend more time on doing homework or participating in school-related activities or sports. However, they should be given more time to do whatever they want.
In today’s society, children are exposed to various pressure from school, family, and even themselves. Children are busy with the school work and all kinds of school activities. Some claim that that’s the right thing for them to do. However, from my perspective, youngsters should be allowed to have more time to do something they like. This perspective will be supported in the following paragraphs.
First off, doing whatever they want enables children to relax. The majority of youngsters are extremely tired nowadays. During the morning, they have to go to school and have classes. At noon, they may have to participate in the school club activities. After school, children may even be forced to have an extra curriculum and finish the school homework. After completing the whole day and taking a shower, they may even need to memorize some vocabulary on the bed. Exhaustion always devours them. However, having time to do whatever they want can offer some breaks which enable them to have a breath outside the busy life. They do not need to think about their GPA and how to get their dream school’s offer while doing something they like. Take myself for an example, from getting up to going to bed, even if there are no any space for me to relax, my mom always asks me to watch some soap operas after dinner to relax. Watching my favorite soap opera and eating some snacks, I seem to be free from all the peer pressure and the heavy school work. The time after dinner is my heaven for the day.
Secondly, giving children more time to do whatever they like can enhance their study efficiency. During the day, kids always feel tired and exhausted, being unable to concentrate sometimes. For some of the kids, even if they seem extremely diligent every day, their study efficiency may not be so favorable. The heavy school work and activities leave no space for them to take a slow breath, which influences their efficiency greatly. Regarding this, offering some time to youngsters to do something they like can bolster their efficiency because it can help them to empty their mind and get some fresh air, which aids them to recover from exhaustion. For instance, after watching the soap opera and walking back to my room to study, I can always finish all my homework within 1 hour. However, before my mom allowing me to relax, most of the time, no matter how much homework was left, I needed to spend more than 2 hours to complete all the stuff.
In a word, although children are highly busy every day, they should be allowed to have more time to do whatever they want.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 826, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...g up to going to bed, even if there are no any space for me to relax, my mom alway...
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Line 5, column 195, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ng unable to concentrate sometimes. For some of the kids, even if they seem extremely dilig...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2145.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74557522124 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43650172282 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477876106195 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4725793895 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.8 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.08 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.08 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375412121732 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121007088026 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115008495653 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.309659018121 0.150856017488 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837395048953 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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