Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Now days, in line with working requirement, children teaching orientation is changing which is motivating children to have sense of orientation. While opponent argue that children are prefer to learn about cooperating towards more useful adults in the future. Based on both assumptions, I believe that competition and cooperation could be encouraged to the children equally for developing balance personal characteristics of children.
Limitation of working opportunities especially for young workers, encourage children to be taught about competition both in school and house. Several lessons in ...
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Sentence: While opponent argue that children are prefer to learn about cooperating towards more useful adults in the future.
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Sentence: Based on both assumptions, I believe that competition and cooperation could be encouraged to the children equally for developing balance personal characteristics of children.
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Sentence: Particularly concern is about how to encourage children in developing their personal competencies rather than eliminating their rivals even they face a crisis situation.
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Sentence: Then it indicates they tend to apply cooperating skills since they were child until they are become adults.
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Suggestion: Refer to were and child
Sentence: Based on explanations above, I argue that particularly children could be encouraged both of sense of competition and cooperation to initiate balanced value and personal capability.
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