Ielts writing task 1 table
The table compares the worldwide market share of notebook computer manufacturers during two successive years, 2006 and 2007.
As can be seen from the table, HP was the leading company in market share for both 2 years, whereas Fujitsu-Siemens only held the smallest percentage of market sharing.
From the table, it is clear that Dell increased markedly its market share from 16.6% in 2006 to just over 20% in 2007. However, this figure was the second following HP’s sharing percentage, 34% in 2007 which grew up slightly from just over one-third in 2006. Besides, there was a rise in Toshiba’s share, though not much, from 6.2% to 7.3%.
According to the table, other notebook manufacturers saw its significant fall in market share, from 22.8% to 19.3%, which made their sales the third – after both HP and Dell. The figure for market share of Fujitsu – Siemens in 2007, 2.3% was around half of it, 4.8% in 2006. Acer did not reduce considerably from 11.6% to just over a tenth. And there was a small drop of 0.4 % in the sharing of Lenovo from 6.6% in 2006.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 233, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rket share of Fujitsu – Siemens in 2007, 2.3% was around half of it, 4.8% in 2006...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, second, third, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 893.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 187.0 196.424390244 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77540106952 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54335427601 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 106.607317073 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598930481283 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 241.2 283.868780488 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7967389859 43.030603864 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2222222222 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7777777778 22.9334400587 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88888888889 5.23603664747 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0138235482589 0.215688989381 6% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00817389383862 0.103423049105 8% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.023119263048 0.0843802449381 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0183912611369 0.15604864568 12% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318545987044 0.0819641961636 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.2329268293 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 61.2550243902 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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