According to the letter, the author advises that the city Parkville should stop organized athletic competiton for children under nine. To support the suggestion, the author tells us that over 4000 of these young children suffered injuiries. A recent study of young-league players in several major cities reported that there were psychological pressure exerted in coaches and parents who wanted to win games. Also, long time sessions takes up the sime of studying of these children. While this suggestion is problematic, there are some loopholes in it. We need to reexmaine them carefully.
To begin with, the fact that over 4000 injuires of these children is not evident to prove the suggestion.Firstly, the popluation of the Children under 9 is not shown by the author, so we could not figure out how much the injuries takes the part in the whole population.Secondly, we do not know what kinds of injuries did these cihldren have so the main reason of injuries cannot attribute to the youth-league sports.Maybe most of them suffered other diesease which couldn't have on the pitches like colds or cough which are common for the kids at this age.In this way the author should provide moe specific evidence to prove the reason that the youth-league should take the charge.
Another survey shows to us is also unconvicing.The author cites a recent survey in major cities to prove the youth-league should be charged. Firstly ,the scale of the survey is not including the Parkville which is not compelling to show the local condition of the Parkville. Maybe the case in the city is quite different from the major cities researched by the study. Secondly, the conditon of coaches and prarents who wanted to win the game is not persuading to the reason. As the pupurse of these people may also vaies from the Parkville to the major city.Likewise, the atuhor does not provide us the compelling evidence that psychological pressure by them is from their golas of winning games.
Finally,given the education experts say that the long practice sessions for these sports take away the time of studying, this could be true while the author fails to show us convicing evidence that the sports did have a bad influence on these children's acdemic studies. Because firstly the author does not show us the time on the sports has taken excessive time of children.Then the study of these children did have been influenced by the sports. Moreover, the suggestion of the author obsecures the kinds of the sports which can not be feasible and the evidence he shows fails to support this suggestion again. In the first local survey the author cites the sports is young-league sports, the second survey it shifts to the young-league soccer,while in the author's suggestion it turns to organized athletic competition. It will almost confound everyone when they read this letter.
In conclusion, the author's recommendation is not well supported by the evidences.To support the suggestion, the author should make an exhaustive s
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 509 350
No. of Characters: 2458 1500
No. of Different Words: 226 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.75 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.829 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.554 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.789 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.896 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.531 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.169 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Firstly
... is not evident to prove the suggestion.Firstly, the popluation of the Children under 9...
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... takes the part in the whole population.Secondly, we do not know what kinds of injuries ...
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Suggestion: Maybe
...ot attribute to the youth-league sports.Maybe most of them suffered other diesease wh...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...t of them suffered other diesease which couldnt have on the pitches like colds or cough...
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Suggestion: In
...ich are common for the kids at this age.In this way the author should provide moe ...
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Suggestion: The
... survey shows to us is also unconvicing.The author cites a recent survey in major c...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
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... youth-league should be charged. Firstly ,the scale of the survey is not including...
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Line 5, column 476, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e game is not persuading to the reason. As the pupurse of these people may also va...
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Suggestion: Likewise
...es from the Parkville to the major city.Likewise, the atuhor does not provide us the com...
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Suggestion: , given
...their golas of winning games. Finally,given the education experts say that the long...
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nce on these childrens acdemic studies. Because firstly the author does not show us the...
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Suggestion: Then
...ts has taken excessive time of children.Then the study of these children did have be...
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Suggestion: , while
...vey it shifts to the young-league soccer,while in the authors suggestion it turns to o...
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Line 7, column 759, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...to the young-league soccer,while in the authors suggestion it turns to organized athlet...
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Line 9, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...read this letter. In conclusion, the authors recommendation is not well supported by...
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Suggestion: To
... is not well supported by the evidences.To support the suggestion, the author shou...
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Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
... the suggestion, the author should make an exhaustive s
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, likewise, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2516.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 498.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05220883534 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88740217795 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45983935743 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 761.4 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 137.814779978 57.8364921388 238% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 139.777777778 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6666666667 23.324526521 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 5.70786347227 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143767766882 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464426163245 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442082848306 0.0701772020484 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.080443382874 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548435953342 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.197005988 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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