As my concern, I contend that people today are unlikey be isolated by the region they are living, the rapid development of the Internet makes people connected more intensively than before, it is important for us being aware of what is happening all over the world. In that due to the rapid changes of the world, there seems to be no outsiders at this society. Besides, no one could accurately predict what will happen in the future, as the events happened in the other place could rehearse in the place I live. I will address my views there in after.
To begin with, people get more connected than before so the events may not be isolated with each other. There was a kind of light chemical pullution in the Los Angeles, almost every Chinese student have learned this event in the history class in middle school, I still remrember the photo in our history book, there lots of white Americans walking in the street with masks on their faces. We thought it was horrible to live in such a pulluted place where lots of people die from the pullution.While now in China, because of the air pollution, lots of people must wear maskes outside. So the event is happening again. The lessons cost so much.
In addition, the events today are getting more related. The refugees issues may be the last thing that europeans think about, while they may be the neighbours of the europeans.Maybe yesterday the european people sitll watched the TV showing that there were a huge mount of refugees escaping Syria, well today, they are running to the borders of the european countries in that the authorities made agreements on saving the refugees and open the borders for them. Tomorrow, the refugees may be living next to the normal european people who watched the News yesterday. Now as a Chinese, the news in the europe may be a warning for Chinese, in that we have a troubling neighbour named North Korea, which still makes nuclear experiments today. So in my opinion, the news in other place could be the event in my palce in the future.
Finally, after watching the news of the mosque killing in New Zealand, I knew the Internet could train terrorists. The killer in this event planed the tragedy after he learning from the website of ISIS, the most horrible terrorist group in the world. Thus the power of the Internet really shocked me because people could be trained to kill people in the Internet, maybe the case would happen in the city I live in.
In all, even if there are lots of negative news happening in the world, I belive that people should know these events as the more connected world would be more complex in the future, every thing is possbile to happen from one place to another.
- The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer. 73
- The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing."During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than 78
- The following appeared in a newsletter offering advice to investors."Over 80 percent of the respondents to a recent survey indicated a desire to reduce their intake of foods containing fats and cholesterol, and today low-fat products abound in many food s 29
- "Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image." - Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain 50
- People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling re 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 494, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: While
...e lots of people die from the pullution.While now in China, because of the air pollut...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 70, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'issue'.
Suggestion: issue
... are getting more related. The refugees issues may be the last thing that europeans th...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 177, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Maybe
... may be the neighbours of the europeans.Maybe yesterday the european people sitll wat...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 169, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'learns'.
Suggestion: learns
... this event planed the tragedy after he learning from the website of ISIS, the most horr...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 252, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... horrible terrorist group in the world. Thus the power of the Internet really shocke...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, if, may, really, so, still, thus, well, while, in addition, kind of, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 13.8261648746 7% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64016736402 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38196614465 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495815899582 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.4889674037 48.9658058833 199% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.222222222 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5555555556 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38888888889 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111339041092 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0406187717811 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369794957278 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0736367323545 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381074305245 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.