It is argued that, in order to increase the enrollment and solve the finacial problem of Huamana University, the president plans to excute the online degree programs which works at Omni University. Given that there were few freshmen enrolled by the Huamana University in the last three years meanwhile the expense of maintaining buildings has increased. Knewing that the online degree programs was running successfully in the Omni University by the fact that the online enrollments increased by 50 percent, moreover, the cost of dormitory and classroom was decreasing significantly, the Huamana University president would like to make the same plan to solve the problems. While the online degree programs implement in HU is probelmatic, because there are some loopholes in it. So let's reexamine them carefully.
To begin with, the two univesities are not comparble,let alone the programs' success. Firstly the atuhor does not tells us the locations of the two univestities as the condtions may be significantly different with them. Maybe the Omini Universty is far away from any cities and the number of local students is much less than the Huamana Univesity. So in order to develop the Univesity, the online degree program is feasible in Omni. While on the other hand, may be the Huamana University is at a major ciry where there are so many students in it, so the work in front of the president is not how to devleop the online degree program while discovering the reason why there are so few enrollments. Due to the increasing maintenance of the University, there is a high possiblity that the students would not like to live the broken domitroies as well as to study in the poor classrooms. Secondly, the online program just started for one year, whether this progam would be a long-term feasible policy is still inquestion, if the president brings this program to the Huamana, it would be arbitrary to make this plan hence the outcome is still obsecure which may casue more serious troubles like deficits.
Moreover, the president should foucus on the development of his university while not the others.As the issue has emerged, the most emergent work is to find out the reason of its own while not learn from the other university. As the president tells us, less number enrollments and increasing maintenance are the major problems. For one thing, the reason why there were fewer freshemen may be related to lots of reasons, besides the buidings , there may be the problem of teaching faculty which is not qualative as before due to such significant decreasing in the number of enrollments. If the online degree programs could not be based on a team of good teacher, there would be a predictable debacle in front of this plan. So the president should find out other plans before making decisions.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: It is argued that, in order to increase the enrollment and solve the finacial problem of Huamana University, the president plans to excute the online degree programs which works at Omni University.
Error: finacial Suggestion: financial
Error: excute Suggestion: excite
Sentence: While the online degree programs implement in HU is probelmatic, because there are some loopholes in it.
Error: probelmatic Suggestion: problematic
Sentence: To begin with, the two univesities are not comparble,let alone the programs' success.
Error: univesities Suggestion: universities
Error: comparble Suggestion: comparable
Sentence: Firstly the atuhor does not tells us the locations of the two univestities as the condtions may be significantly different with them.
Error: atuhor Suggestion: author
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: univestities Suggestion: universities
Error: condtions Suggestion: conditions
Sentence: While on the other hand, may be the Huamana University is at a major ciry where there are so many students in it, so the work in front of the president is not how to devleop the online degree program while discovering the reason why there are so few enrollments.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: devleop Suggestion: develop
Error: ciry Suggestion: city
Sentence: Due to the increasing maintenance of the University, there is a high possiblity that the students would not like to live the broken domitroies as well as to study in the poor classrooms.
Error: domitroies Suggestion: dominates
Error: possiblity Suggestion: possibility
Sentence: Secondly, the online program just started for one year, whether this progam would be a long-term feasible policy is still inquestion, if the president brings this program to the Huamana, it would be arbitrary to make this plan hence the outcome is still obsecure which may casue more serious troubles like deficits.
Error: obsecure Suggestion: obscure
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: long-term Suggestion: longer
Error: casue Suggestion: case
Error: inquestion Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: progam Suggestion: program
Sentence: Moreover, the president should foucus on the development of his university while not the others.As the issue has emerged, the most emergent work is to find out the reason of its own while not learn from the other university.
Error: foucus Suggestion: focus
Sentence: For one thing, the reason why there were fewer freshemen may be related to lots of reasons, besides the buidings , there may be the problem of teaching faculty which is not qualative as before due to such significant decreasing in the number of enrollments.
Error: qualative Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: freshemen Suggestion: freshmen
Error: buidings Suggestion: buildings
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 472 350
No. of Characters: 2289 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.661 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.85 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.667 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 156 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.765 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.338 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.454 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 781, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...ause there are some loopholes in it. So lets reexamine them carefully. To begin w...
^^^^
Line 3, column 53, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , let
...h, the two univesities are not comparble,let alone the programs success. Firstly the...
^^^^
Line 3, column 68, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'programs'' or 'program's'?
Suggestion: programs'; program's
...esities are not comparble,let alone the programs success. Firstly the atuhor does not te...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 114, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'tell'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: tell
...ms success. Firstly the atuhor does not tells us the locations of the two univestitie...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 114, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'tell'
Suggestion: tell
...ms success. Firstly the atuhor does not tells us the locations of the two univestitie...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 97, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
... of his university while not the others.As the issue has emerged, the most emergen...
^^
Line 5, column 254, Rule ID: LESS_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean 'less numb'?
Suggestion: less numb
...university. As the president tells us, less number enrollments and increasing maintenance ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 441, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...to lots of reasons, besides the buidings , there may be the problem of teaching fa...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, hence, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, as to, as well as, for one thing, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2339.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 470.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97659574468 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78476472182 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463829787234 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 747.0 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.8210732354 57.8364921388 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.588235294 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6470588235 23.324526521 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35294117647 5.70786347227 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269823958237 0.218282227539 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0886612380096 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706135297168 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201630853721 0.128457276422 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0890748564373 0.0628817314937 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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