It is an idealogical suggestion that the high education institue require their students to study abroad for at least one semester, the student will benefit a lot while it is not feasible for all of them. Actually, from forerign test we can see that there are 40,000 students in front of this screen to take test annually while the other over 5 millions of them have other choices instead of going abroad. So when we study this essay deeper, we may discover that study is the individual business while it does not need the force outside to push on.
To begin with, I must admit that studying abroad has various of merits including the enhanced acdemic skill while not only the skill you can get, it is a multi-dimension enhancement after one coming back to the motherland who study aborad. Due to the development of our society, the world is becoming more and more connected hence we neen more communications between each others, the acdemic communication in most fields will be more beneficial to either of the people from different countries, even some of the majors which we considered not necessary to be communicated abroad like the socialism theory in China now opens the gates of western countries in order to let more foreign friends to comprehend what is our Government doing as well as the traget of our nations- "Chineses Dream" with a peaceful renaissance.
However, when we are exploiting the goal of this suggestion, we may find it is in the consideration of the students will ger more cultivated and enhanced after studying abroad. It is absolutely right while there are so some obstacles as well as alternatives for the students in that not everyone of them should study abroad.
FIrstly, It is a cosiderable cost of studying abroad. As the essay put this itself as a requirement, we shoud consider both of the students who are funded by Universities or Governments and thoes who fund themselves. The students with sponsorship should study abroad because of their qualidication, while they are not majority. Likewise, the sponsorship is not sufficient to a large scale of students.On the othe hand, for the students who fund themselves maybe not very rich, so the pressure for them would be an obstacle before they want to study.
Secondly, as the essence of the studying to me, it is a procedure of discerning oneself with out others' advocates,hence if a studen find himself should go abroad to study as the local resource is insufficient to him\her to make more progress, they will know how to go along the path in the future, while if a student do not consider studying is importan at all, I believe there is no necessary for him\ her to study aborad as a waste of time and money.
Thirldy, there are still lots of altenative idea which could benefit the universities and students. LIke, the universities should sift some of the excellnt student to fund them to study abroad like what they did previously. On the other hand ,for the students who want to go abroad while have economic limitations, they can study online due to the development of the Internet, Like the Khan Univesity in the Internet which can teach students from primary schools to the Graduate schools.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, hence, however, if, likewise, may, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, at least, even so, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2667.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 550.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84909090909 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8259137336 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487272727273 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 838.8 704.065955056 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 23.0359550562 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 134.979932665 60.3974514979 223% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 177.8 118.986275619 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.6666666667 23.4991977007 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0666666667 5.21951772744 212% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193909751366 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782288662298 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471922425081 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108141374626 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210076873901 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 14.1392134831 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 48.8420337079 89% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.1743820225 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.2143820225 146% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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