Given that there is an debate between the pubilsher and editor about the poor selling of Newsbeat magazine, the publisher suggests that the magazine should alter the foucus on politics with economics and personla finance, she shows a recent survey of readers that they would like more economic iusses than political ones. While the editor, on the other hand, the extensive political coverage is the one of the most important features of the magazine as very few magazines do this. While the evdidence of theirs are problematic which are not convincing, there are some loopholes among them.We need to reexamine them carefully.
To begin with, the suvery from the pubulisher is not compelling. Firstly, as she tells us that readers like economic issues more while whether the survey is related to the magazine is inquestion. Because neither of them tells us where do the magazine sell and where did the survey take. As the scales of them maybe different, or in other words, Maybe the Newsbeat is a national magazine which covers the country while the survey is merely a local invsetigation which few people invovled to take the survey, or vice versa. Hence the result of the survey is not suggestive to the problem of the magazine. Secondly, the magazine featrued with the political coverage does not mean it do not have the sufficient content to satisfiy the readers given that the author does not tell us this detail. May be thie magazine merely wants to grasp some people's eyeballs while already celebrated with the ecomonic content in the magazine, for example like the face of Trump or Merkel are more familiar than some experts in economic area possibly.
In additon, it would be hasty to change the style of the magazine to economic one as there must be some professional economic magazines already while if the Newsbeat runs into this field it would face another pressure form the competitors which are expertized in economy. Also, whether the previous readers of them welcoming this change is still in a big question, as they had adapt to the style of the magazine, as this big change would influence their affliations to the Newsbeat.
However, the evidence from the editor that the magazine featuring with poliltical coverage is also unconvincing as no one tell us whteher the readers really like this set. It is true that very few magazines offer ectensive political coverage to the readers. In this point we should know why the others do not take this method as well as why this is the feature of the Newbeat. Maybe among competitors' , the Newsbeat makes a better job of reporting political news or possibly the readers really like economic issues. While there is no compelling evidence to prove thses points. So the atuhor should figure out the really conditons.
In all, as further evidence should be supplied to suport their ideas, both of the two sides offer unconvincing reasons to prove the stands of their own.A comprehensive survey is required. They should find out the reader of the magazines' favor and the conditions of all competitors to detemine whether this change will improve the present situation.
- TOEFL T P O 46 - Integrated Writing Task 3
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- TOEFL T P O 48 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 80
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 529 350
No. of Characters: 2552 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.796 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.824 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.473 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 183 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 135 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.45 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.96 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.537 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.171 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 21, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
Given that there is an debate between the pubilsher and editor...
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Line 1, column 590, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: We
...ng, there are some loopholes among them.We need to reexamine them carefully. To...
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Line 3, column 74, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e pubulisher is not compelling. Firstly, as she tells us that readers like econom...
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Line 3, column 524, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...vled to take the survey, or vice versa. Hence the result of the survey is not suggest...
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Line 3, column 682, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'does'?
Suggestion: does
...the political coverage does not mean it do not have the sufficient content to sati...
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Line 5, column 219, Rule ID: FROM_FORM[4]
Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
...is field it would face another pressure form the competitors which are expertized in...
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Line 5, column 378, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'adapted'.
Suggestion: adapted
...is still in a big question, as they had adapt to the style of the magazine, as this b...
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Line 5, column 378, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'adapted'.
Suggestion: adapted
...is still in a big question, as they had adapt to the style of the magazine, as this b...
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Line 7, column 401, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... of the Newbeat. Maybe among competitors , the Newsbeat makes a better job of repo...
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Line 7, column 517, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...he readers really like economic issues. While there is no compelling evidence to prov...
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Line 9, column 153, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: A
...easons to prove the stands of their own.A comprehensive survey is required. They ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for example, as well as, in other words, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2611.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 527.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95445920304 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53939278111 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457305502846 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 851.4 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.3380259615 57.8364921388 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.55 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.35 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1 5.70786347227 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202698621645 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633350608458 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051386453939 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120356529646 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519907311532 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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