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Family is the core of our lives. It is the trigger of the most sincere feelings. Consequently the members of the family are having great impact on each other .Another definition of family is our circle of friends ,which also contains the action of having impacts on one another .Although I am quite a sociable person ,I think that family is the main factor of influencing their young adults. My view is based on personal and phsychological reasons.
Personally ,before getting older children are taught some primary things from their parents like saying hello to people, respecting old people and so on. In every stage of life, parents tend to have deep conversations about life, about them and this world. Every word can play a huge role in the thinking of the child as they do not have the well-formed and self-controlled ways of making decisions and acting in various situations. I still have a lot to learn from my parents as I have not got the peak of my self-thinking and decision-making. And I feel the influence of my parents and family members on me in every step I do.
Phsychologically , young adults have the tendency to repeat their parents actions. They consider their family members as role models for them and try to follow the way of their. For example my little sister always copies what I do and even while making decisions she thinks the way I do. I can imply that I have my small proportion of impact on her as a family member.
To cut the story short, I firmly believe that family is the number one influence-maker and compared to friends, they are more likely to be the ones whom young adults are going to follow and reflect their own ideas and steps one day.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Some people say that the internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? 60
- Agree/ Disagree 3
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- While mobile phones have many advantages a number of problems have also resulted from them or the ways in which they are used What are some of these problems What solutions can you suggest for solving these problems 91
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, so, still, well, while, for example, i feel, i think, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1384.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59800664452 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69553508416 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554817275748 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.8220419492 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8571428571 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07142857143 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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