It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than young people in many countries in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Overpopulation is one of the major dilemma of some nations. In this light, it is anticipated that older generation will have a bigger population than young people. In the writer's view, this is a beneficial development due to its undeniable effectiveness of improved health care system and laws with regard to popuation control. Also decrease in population if they die, lesser pollution and more space to live-in follows.

Apparently, the higher proportion of old folks signals an effective healthcare system in the country. Government programs such as health propagation, building hospitals and researching more on the cures of diseases have significantly increased the longevity of life. Furthermore, policies like the two child policy, and legalization of abortion in other nations have contributed in this positive development of wellness.

Futuristically, as people grow old, they will eventually succumbed, so the population will decline. This will lead to lesser pollution, because production of goods such as fuel, automobiles and food will decrease, whereby producing these commodities usually burns toxic gases to be successfully made. Also, there will be lesser emission of carbon dioxide, because there will be a small number of people utilizing cars.

Another could be the possibilty for an increase in employment. Older individuals will soon retire, thereby vacating their positions, which will be superseded by younger generations. Ultimately, there will be a wider space for everyone. Deforestation for the purpose of constructing more buildings will be halted, hence the natural habitat of animals will be safeguarded, resulting to the normalization of the ecosystem.

To conclude, the significant increase of gray haired individual, also means that health is equally distributed by the government, and as more people will perish beneficial results, such as less number of people, pollution and also enough space for the majority.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'succumb'
Suggestion: succumb
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Line 3, column 379, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, so, therefore, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1162.0 1615.20841683 72% => OK
No of words: 214.0 315.596192385 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42990654206 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02406858866 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 176.041082164 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.598130841121 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 373.5 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.7653718044 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8333333333 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8333333333 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 7.06120827912 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244652504002 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0970600822972 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487795691865 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152521736313 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474171360392 0.056905535591 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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