The diagram shows the cause effect of using fossil fuel to human problem in the world todays.
In the world’s today, the amount of fossil fuel has been reduce until more than 50 percent. There is because the fossil fuel as main of fuel for many of vehicles and factories. A lot of people using vehicles for their necessity to go to work or go somewhere and they are built man factories in the outskirt. There are bring us an effect for our world such as the weather become hotter than before and the climate change. The climate change affect to change the season in the world like length of drought in the farmland. That could make the farmer have poor of harvest and they do not have much money for their life.
With the loss of harvest, many people in the village move to the city with hope they would get proper job and improve their live. In fact, they do not get any jobs so they become jobless. A lot of villagers come to city and make overcrowding and add more population for a number of young people. The effect of that make the amount of crimes increase and become higher every year.
For all of that problem cause many villagers who move to the city will live in slum and dirty place. They will get lack of clean water so it make they get many diseases, for example waterborne diseases, diarrhea, typhus and etc. Moreover, they feel social problem like social inequality with other people because the class of social depend on their wealthy.
Overall, using fossil fuel give a complex problem for human life, start with the climate change until the social problem. Therefore, we have to keep our environment still stable and we can safe it from endangered to continuity our live. As a result, we can get better life and happy in the future.
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