The young people in some countries are encouraged to work or travel for year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss about the advantages and the disadvantages.
In recently, the young people in some countries are encouraged to work or travel for year between finishing high school and starting university studies. There are advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
The youth who work or travel will be free to express their feeling. They can evolve their abilities and skills when they live in the place where they do not know before. As we know, the youth is the age that they try to find of soul themselves. They try to find and understand how they can develop and contribute their talents to be good in society. For instance, the young people who work as a volunteer in some organizations can learn how to manage and improve their leadership ability for they groups. They will earn some values which can contribute to the society. Then the teenagers who travel to some places will learn about how they can survive in a bad condition and try to communicate with local people who have different culture. Thus, the boys and girls who try to improve their skill with work or travel that is good for their social ability and for preparing themselves in community.
On the other hand, it will give bad influence to teenagers, if they cannot control their time to make balance between work or travel with their studies. For example, the students who spend too much their time to work or travel will left behind in some subjects. It will give impact to their score in the school. They will be lazy to do their homework and they will lose their concentration when they are in the school. They just think about their work and their plan for traveling. In addition, they cannot enhance their intellectual ability and become the person who does not have any important knowledge.
In conclusion, the youth have to make balance their behavior. They can improve and free to chose what they want to be. They have to remember that develop their social ability and adding experiences are notable but become good students are important too. As a result, they can be a good member who will give benefit to their societies
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In recently,
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The youth who work or travel will be free to express their feeling.
The youths who work or travel will be free to express their feeling.
Sentence: As we know, the youth is the age that they try to find of soul themselves.
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Sentence: For instance, the young people who work as a volunteer in some organizations can learn how to manage and improve their leadership ability for they groups.
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Suggestion: Refer to they and groups
or travel will left behind in some subjects.
or travel will be left behind in some subjects.
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