It goes without saying that in this sophisticated and radically progressive era in which we live, all human beings have always been involved in a great struggle to improve their mental condition by doing miscellaneous activities at their leisure time. Whereas some people debate that it is important for people to do the same activities that they do at work in their free time, on the other side of the continuum, stand others, believing that this is not a great idea and doing different activities from what they do at workplace is a paramount factor in this hectic life. As far as I am concerned, I categorically concur with the second mental attitude. In the ensuing essay, my perspective will be perspicuously substantiated by the underlying and conspicuous reasons.
To begin with, nobody could overlook this fact that doing an activity every day is really time-consuming because it does not change your environment as well as improve your mental condition. Under such a circumstance, if a person performs and experiences some other activities that he does not actually do at his work, he will definitely enhance his mental attitude because it is really new to him and moreover, he feels good by doing an attractive activity. An example can shed some light on this subject. Consider a person who wants to work on weekends and eats the same lunch as he eats every day. If this individual carries out those activities at that time, he will absolutely feel upset after a couple of weeks. This is because he has not changed his environment and has not done any new activity to improve his mental condition. He has just repeated two activities at different times.
Furthermore, one of the most exquisite points of doing different activities from what individuals do at work is that it really creates several opportunities for them to become familiar with other persons and to experience new things. An example can drive this notion dramatically home. In the aforementioned example, consider that person performs other activities such as swimming and playing tennis on weekends. In such a situation, that person has this ability to find new friends and also do several collaborative exercises with them. Therefore, he can either undergo a new circumstance or enhance his mental attitude by doing various activities.
In conclusion, taking into account the aforementioned reasons and examples, I am of the opinion that it will be great for people if they carry out different activities in their leisure which are not closer resemblance to they do at work and their daily life. This is because it opens up new doors for them to undergo a new activity and also changes their environment to feel better in this hectic life.
- TOEFL T P O 41 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- People in communities can make decisions that protect and improve the natural environment. Which one of the following three actions is most useful for people to do if they want to help the environment in their local community? Explain why? Increase access 73
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- TPO-33 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, furthermore, if, look, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, in conclusion, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2271.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9693654267 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90194260287 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474835886214 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.512172226 48.9658058833 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.166666667 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3888888889 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302389552346 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0964174946978 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10236891118 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209666721478 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631686928828 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 10.002688172 285% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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