"The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend."
"""Of the two leading real estate firms in our town-Adams Realty and Fitch Realty-Adams Realty is"
"clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster"
"as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year,"when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell"
"your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."""
In this letter, the author, homwowner, points out that there are 2 good real states in his/her city. He/She also projects that Adams reality is better than Fitch reality. To support the conclusion, the article renders the fact that Adams has more agents. To bolster this assertation, he/she also mentions homes listed with Adams sell faster than Fitch. To further supply, the letter also cites that he/she could sell home sooner by Admas reallity. Close scrutiny of each of these facts leaves that none of them lend credible support to the conclusion as it stands.
The author assime that for selling home he/she must use either Fitch or Adams reallity, but not both. However, he/she provides no evidence that for selling better the house must be chosen between two cours of actions rathar than following both. Lacking any such evidence, it is entirely possible that implementing both reallities would help to sell the house sooner with higher price than implementing either one alone.
Assuming that at one time he/she could sell a house sooner with higher price, the author inferes the similar condition today and in the furure. But it is possible that these agencies have changed over time. For example, Fitch reallity may have promoted these days. If so, the author’s conclusion is unjustified.
The author’s recommendation relies on what might be a poor analogy between selling his/her houses with Adams reality and Fitch reality. Perhaps, the same course of action might be in effective in selling house with Fitch agancy due to geolical differences between two houses. If it turns out, for example, that the house he/she sold with Adams had better area, short distance to public transportations and better consition to name just a few, then the author’s conclusion is uncompelling at best. In short, what might be happened in first house would not necessarily happen in second house.
The author contends that Last year Adams revenue was higher than Fitch revenue, But it does not mention how. It is possible that Admas gets higher comission from sellers. If so, even if we assume that he/she can sell a house sooner with Adams agancy, he/she has to pay more fee. Before I can determine the extent to which the study supports the conclusion, I really need this essential information about what percentage of selling fee Adams and Fitch realities get to draw the conclusion that selloing with Admas reallity is better than selling with Fitch.
In sum, the letter relies on vauge terms, questionable sample and doubtful assumptions that render it unconvincing and ill grounded as it stands. To persuade me that he/she can sell house quickly with Adams reality, the article must provide better facts. To power the conclusion that he/she can sell at higher price, it also needs to supply information respecting comission fee and other possible costs.
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Sentence: To bolster this assertation, he/she also mentions homes listed with Adams sell faster than Fitch.
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Sentence: To further supply, the letter also cites that he/she could sell home sooner by Admas reallity.
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Sentence: The author assime that for selling home he/she must use either Fitch or Adams reallity, but not both.
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Sentence: However, he/she provides no evidence that for selling better the house must be chosen between two cours of actions rathar than following both.
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Sentence: Lacking any such evidence, it is entirely possible that implementing both reallities would help to sell the house sooner with higher price than implementing either one alone.
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Sentence: Assuming that at one time he/she could sell a house sooner with higher price, the author inferes the similar condition today and in the furure.
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Sentence: Perhaps, the same course of action might be in effective in selling house with Fitch agancy due to geolical differences between two houses.
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Sentence: If it turns out, for example, that the house he/she sold with Adams had better area, short distance to public transportations and better consition to name just a few, then the author's conclusion is uncompelling at best.
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Sentence: It is possible that Admas gets higher comission from sellers.
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Sentence: If so, even if we assume that he/she can sell a house sooner with Adams agancy, he/she has to pay more fee.
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Sentence: Before I can determine the extent to which the study supports the conclusion, I really need this essential information about what percentage of selling fee Adams and Fitch realities get to draw the conclusion that selloing with Admas reallity is better than selling with Fitch.
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Error: reallity Suggestion: reality
Sentence: In sum, the letter relies on vauge terms, questionable sample and doubtful assumptions that render it unconvincing and ill grounded as it stands.
Error: vauge Suggestion: vague
Sentence: To power the conclusion that he/she can sell at higher price, it also needs to supply information respecting comission fee and other possible costs.
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Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 17 2
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No. of Words: 486 350
No. of Characters: 2313 1500
No. of Different Words: 227 200
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No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
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Avg. Sentence Length: 20.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.487 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.542 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.19 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5