The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world. Schools should cut art and music out of the curriculum so that children can focus on useful subjects such as information technology. To what extent do you agree?
The pace of modern life requires us to concentrate more on education. As a result, schools keen to useful subjects such as information and technology very much. But I argue that these schools should allocate equal time for teaching all the subjects.
From a personal perspective, science subjects are deciding factor for students to find a good prospective job because the knowledge from such subjects which they acquired are so essential for greater future prosperity. Moreover, nowadays, almost employers often discriminate against those who don’t have a degree gained from universities of science and technology. It is the reason why such people find it arduous to gain the chance to move up the career ladder. Consequently, they are not able to afford a high quality of life.
In my opinion, this does not mean that only such subjects are in priority of students and their institutions. First of all, others subject such as art and music also are key factors influencing in their job prospects and domestic economic growth, meaning that society will benefit more if students are passionate about what they are learning because of those who choose these subjects from their special capability and favorite. Second, nobody can really predict which areas of knowledge will be most useful to society in the future, and it may be that employers will begin to value creative thinking skills.
To sum up, although it might seem sensible for schools to focus on teaching subjects which are really crucial in the future, I personally prefer the equal time for all subjects
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, moreover, really, second, so, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1319.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09266409266 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67189836278 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602316602317 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.442730823 49.4020404114 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.909090909 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5454545455 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9090909091 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196059411996 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701091584603 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050675313883 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122825833185 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337266443087 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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