TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task
The passage discusses the Roman navy attacked the Greek port city. Also the text explains that Greeks defended themeselves with a unique weaopon called a burning mirror. This weapon produced fire using heat of sun. The passage claims that this story is just a myth and provides three reasons for supporting claim. However the talk refutes each of autor's reasons by stating three reasons.
First, the text says that the ancient Greeks were not advanced enough to build such weopons. However, the professor explains that the weopon was not so complex to manufacture. The talk suggests that by combining many small parts of the copper surface the Greeks people could build the weapon.
Second, the reading contends that burning mirror needs a lot of time to set the ships on fire. Because the sips were made up woods, starting fire took long time. The lecture rejects this idea by stating that in addition of wood there were other stuff that ships made up of them like somethings that named patches. These patches just need scecond to set on fire. After that, the fire spread on all part of the ship.
Third, the passage claims that a burning mirror was not an improvement weapon in comparison with other existing weapon like flaming arrows. The professor rebuts this idea, too. The professor describes that there is a possibility that enemies were familliar with already weopons. So, the ancient Greeks need another weapon like a burning mirror. Enemies could easily see the flaming arrows, but these burning mirror was something new and they had no idea what they were, untile they ships set on fire.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 68, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...oman navy attacked the Greek port city. Also the text explains that Greeks defended ...
^^^^
Line 1, column 315, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...des three reasons for supporting claim. However the talk refutes each of autors reasons...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 228, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...gests that by combining many small parts of the copper surface the Greeks people ...
^^
Line 4, column 482, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'ship'
Suggestion: ship
...had no idea what they were, untile they ships set on fire.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, second, so, third, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1331.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 272.0 270.72406181 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89338235294 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.16803001147 2.5805825403 84% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558823529412 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 394.2 419.366225166 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.7939259635 49.2860985944 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.9444444444 110.228320801 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1111111111 21.698381199 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16666666667 7.06452816374 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 4.45695364238 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.408202283615 0.272083759551 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119179331152 0.0996497079465 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0922251203146 0.0662205650399 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227205933595 0.162205337803 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733136543703 0.0443174109184 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 13.3589403974 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 53.8541721854 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.0289183223 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.49 12.2367328918 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.7273730684 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.