The pie charts below show electricity generation by source in New Zealand and Germany in 1980 and 2010.
The pie charts provide information regarding the comparison in kind of fuels that used to generate electricity in Germany and New Zealand between 1980 and 2010.
Overall, there were the different highest increase for specific resource between Germany and New Zealand. However, both of these countries had far less demand for natural gas in 2010.
A more detailed look at pie charts reveal that the much used resource in New Zealand was coal, and its proportion rose from 50% to 150%. However, this country did not use nuclear as their fuel in generating electricity. In contrast, there were the highest increase in utilizing nuclear in Germany (from 20% to 155%), while the proportion of coal remained unchanged, 28%.
It is interesting to see that the demand for hydro and petroleum in New Zealand and Germany were contrast. While hydro utilization rose from 30% to 46% in NZ, hydro percentage was far less in Germany, only 7% in 1980 and falling to 2% in 2010. On the other hand, the proportion of using petroleum decreased by 9% in NZ, while in Germany the demand of petroleum grew by 5%. It is worth noting that both countries reduced the use of natural gas in big amount, falling by 26-28%.
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fuels that used to generate electricity
'fuels used to generate electricity' or 'fuels that are used to generate electricity'
Sentence: Overall, there were the different highest increase for specific resource between Germany and New Zealand.
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the much used resource in New Zealand was coal,
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Sentence: In contrast, there were the highest increase in utilizing nuclear in Germany from 20 to 155, while the proportion of coal remained unchanged, 28.
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Sentence: It is interesting to see that the demand for hydro and petroleum in New Zealand and Germany were contrast.
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Sentence: It is worth noting that both countries reduced the use of natural gas in big amount, falling by 26-28.
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