In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still student. Do you think this is a good idea?
With the begging” experience is mother of knowledge” in my country Afghanistan people always have a statement that says try to working and studying together. it is the most famous speech between public. So, I love this statement that students or young generations working and studying together. However, it is nice idea and I have some reasons. Like, youth can increase their knowledge and also they can increase experience, they can make some money for faculty expenditures and they can understand the theories because they practically do that in fields.
First, youths or teenagers can increase their knowledge if they working with that. So, it is grate idea if they can continue both of them together. For instance, when I was student in faculty or when I was sophomore, I started my job as admin Assistant and after few months they paid me near 100$ per month it was good money for a young that is student at university or school. At least, teenagers can support their life. So, I love this statement that says teenagers have jobs while they are still students.
Second, another important issue is experience during studying in school or faculty. So, it is very good idea that teenagers or youths studying and working. For instance, they can increase their experience for example, when teenagers or youths are studying about theories it is vague for them. However, when they studying and working together they can understand better. For instance, I was student in faculty of agriculture professor explained something about the greenhouse it was complex for me. But, after I started my job as livelihood officer and distribute few greenhouse frames for farmers. So, I understand better about theories. I like this that working and studying it is really helpful for understand different subjects.
Conclusion, as I mentioned working and studying have some advantages like, teenagers or youths they can increase their knowledge, they can understand the vague theories. Indeed, working and studying are helpful they can analyze the situations in future and when they are working and studying they can support ourselves or they can pay their expenditures in university or school. I love statement that says teenagers have jobs while they are still student. It brilliant t idea.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, still, while, at least, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13903743316 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77388601966 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.409090909091 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.3256035807 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.3636363636 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276068452513 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104711181673 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101889033269 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206173670653 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650036544744 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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