People’s behaviour is largely determined by forces not of their own making. I agree with the author
regarding the statement. Being a social animal, humans are always influenced by their peers, family and
ultimately society.
Firstly, people tend to seek help from others in their social circle. In order to be in a social circle, people
need to adjust with the circle’s thinking and moral principles. A person, having a different principle, who
wishes to be in a particular group, must modify their behaviour and principle. In my personal
experience, I had a hard time socialising during my high school days. I had to adjust with other people’s
principles and behaviour in order to enter a group. I could not control my own behaviour because I had
to socialise with others in my high school.
Secondly, people generally tend to be shy when they have to stand out in a group. They do not want to
express their views openly because they have a fear of being scrutinized. This fear leads to suppression
of views. They suppress their behaviour and modify it according to the situation. When Galileo Galilei
expressed his views about earth being a sphere, he was ridiculed and punished by the society for being
iconoclastic. This might have stopped others from presenting a new view. So, people inhibited their
views, which led to change of behaviour. Yet, some people stand out and express their view successfully.
They are able to change the society as a whole. These type of people are rare in existence. So we cannot
rule out this aspect as well.
Finally, people’s behaviour is largely determined by their experiences which they face during their
lifetime. A novice is mended by the experiences he/she faces. A pugnacious person might learn a
valuable lesson in life and might alter his/her behaviour. A person facing different horrors might come
out strong after facing such situations. My grandfather used to tell me stories about his life experiences,
how they changed his behaviour, ultimately shaping him into the man he was. He used to be a simple
village man who earned a living due to agriculture. Due to some circumstances, he had to depart to the
city. As a simple village man, he could not survive a day in the city. He had to alter his behaviour and
adapt to the city life. His experience in the city moulded him into the current person.
As a whole, we can say that people’s behaviour is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 20, column 60, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...life and might alter his/her behaviour. A person facing different horrors might c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2102.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 424.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95754716981 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82971694182 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490566037736 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 6.24550561798 288% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 23.0359550562 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.4130543046 60.3974514979 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.8064516129 118.986275619 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.6774193548 23.4991977007 58% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.12903225806 5.21951772744 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 25.0 4.97078651685 503% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.83258426966 290% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233927133116 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072914275448 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142350881173 0.0758088955206 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0796557636447 0.150359130593 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138101982643 0.0667264976115 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 14.1392134831 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 12.1743820225 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.2143820225 64% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.7820224719 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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