Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably.
To what extend to you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, our lifespan has been greatly extended in comparison to the past thanks to various healthcare innovations, thus, some people believe that it is a must to significantly increase in the retirement age. In my opinion, extend the working age could lead to some remarkable benefits, however, it would be accompanied by some inevitable problems.
It is undeniable that changing the working-age ceiling could bring considerable advantages to the nations. Firstly, having the workforce increased remarkably with experienced workers would allow the economy to develop in all aspects and create wealth for their nations. Foreseeing this, many countries have applied the working-age extension in their policies and received a great improvement in all economy performance index. Another interesting perk of retirement age extension is that it helps companies to have their experts staying longer, which results in promising organization performance. A great example of this is more than half of the CEOs of corporations in last year Forbes’ top 100 is above 65, and these people are all regarded as their company invaluable assets.
On the other hand, the increasing age of retirement could lead to some serious social problems. The first issue is that it would result in corporations with the old men network holding top positions for too long, which would discourage younger and potential employees to climb up their career ladder. Many entrepreneurs have revealed that one of the reasons they chose to start their own business despite having experience working for prestigious companies simply is that it is impossible to thrive for top positions. Another issue is that when having to work at such old age, people would lose their enthusiasm towards their jobs, and no longer keeping their efficiency. After decades of working hard, most employees should spend their time taking rests, enjoying life and doing things that they have always wanted to do instead of continuing to devote to works.
To sum up, increasing the retirement age has its pros and cons, thus, it is suggested that policymakers should make careful consideration before choosing to apply this policy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, so, thus, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1842.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35465116279 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86357719723 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598837209302 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.7236268426 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.692307692 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4615384615 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194797025892 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0750548040525 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468201812237 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126504685376 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519157329057 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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