The diagram shows how fruit is canned.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given diagram below demonstrates the process in which the fruit is canned.
The general view of process gives detail informations. This process with quite simple machines includes 02 main steps in order of conformity, starting with subjecting fresh fruit to preliminary treatment and ending with canning fruit and providing for customers.
The first step is the fresh fruit collection and subjected to preliminary treatment before canning. First of all, the fruit which conforms to the standards of manufacturer, is chosen and harvested by hand carefully from gardens or farms. The trucks or lorries transport them to the factory where have more machine for the processing industry. After that, the fresh fruit is washed by clean and constant water to remove sand and soil. It’s necessary for next stage. Because then we check quality of fruit by seeing through magnifying glass to weed out low quality fruit such as: over-ripe fruit, fruit crushed,... and retain good quality fruit. After this stage is completely, the chosen fruit is stored with low temperature by a modern refrigeration equipment. They are classified into different types depending on their weigh and size. The following stage is that the fruit which is in the same type, is peeled and sliced to reject peel and corn, by hand or simple machine before canning, the rest of fruit is the main ingradient to produce.
The last step is treating fruit after canning. To begin with, the boxes which are used to can fruit, can be made from different suitable materials examples: glass, iron, bronze, paper... We put into the boxes not only fruit but also other ingradient such as: water, suger, syrup,...and the stage is carried out by automatic machines. Following this, the boxes with full ingradient and exact weigh are sealed. Once sealing boxes have finished, cooking is able to start. Using suitable temperature to cook is very important because it guarantees sterilizing and keeps good smell, specific taste and excellent quality of food. Then, the manufacturer helps customers to discriminate one produce from another by labelling different stickers. In the end, the final productions are kept in a safe, dry and clean warehouse and despatched to consumption place like: markets, supermarkets, shops, stores,... or to customers.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'diagrams'.
Suggestion: diagrams
The given diagram below demonstrates the process in which...
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Line 3, column 613, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
... such as: over-ripe fruit, fruit crushed,... and retain good quality fruit. After ...
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Line 3, column 692, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to fruit'
Suggestion: to fruit
...er this stage is completely, the chosen fruit is stored with low temperature by a mod...
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Line 4, column 278, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
... ingradient such as: water, suger, syrup,...and the stage is carried out by automa...
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Line 4, column 893, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...ke: markets, supermarkets, shops, stores,... or to customers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, such as, first of all, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 7.0 271% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 6.8 309% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 33.7804878049 169% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 965.302439024 201% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 371.0 196.424390244 189% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23989218329 4.92477711251 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 3.73543355544 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70975968816 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 106.607317073 198% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568733153639 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 283.868780488 203% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 14.0 4.33902439024 323% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 8.94146341463 246% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.6946019473 43.030603864 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3636363636 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8636363636 22.9334400587 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09090909091 5.23603664747 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.09268292683 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126471828662 0.215688989381 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0365425286282 0.103423049105 35% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411163719777 0.0843802449381 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.096084821129 0.15604864568 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498686628889 0.0819641961636 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 61.2550243902 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 11.4140731707 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 40.7170731707 223% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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