Economic cycles are a common feature of a capitalist society. When countries struggle with their finances, they are forced to reduce their costs in order to balance their payments. Education is one of the most affected areas when a country has a tight budget. As a result, school board members must decide which components of education are their top priorities. Many people assume that physical education should be the first class to be eliminated. Personally, I believe that arts and music should have their funding reduced instead. I support this opinion for two mains reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Being active is fundamental for living a healthy life. General guidelines suggest that we should engage in exercise between 3 to 5 times a week. Having physical education classes at school is important because it can help fulfill these guidelines. Sometimes parents are not aware of the importance of childhood exercise or do not have the time to take their children to an extracurricular activity; so, their children may lack opportunities to play sports. For example, when I was in middle-school I had soccer classes every day in my curriculum; thus, I was able to keep up with the physical activity guidelines. Soccer was a very enjoyable activity for me, and I was only able to practice at school since there were not soccer fields near where I lived.
Secondly, art and music are easily accessible on your own. Many cities offer music concerts or have art museums. Even if you are not able to go to these places, there are a myriad of ways to access this content, such as the use of internet, books, music tapes, and many others. Being an art aficionado, I have always learned art history through books in my free time. Even without a class at my school, I was able become very knowledgeable at the topic. On the contrary, I would not have been able to become a skilled athlete without the school support.
In conclusion, I think physical education classes should always be available at schools, even when there is a reduction in school funding. Keeping up with physical activity guidelines is very important, and frequently it is very challenging to do on your own whereas arts and music can be studied independently.
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...and music can be studied independently.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, whereas, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1877.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88802083333 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75687543098 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546875 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3417810108 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.380952381 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04761904762 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317396605265 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926225659418 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0864765521651 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198937625697 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0672034059839 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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