Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
The author states that Pirouettes Ballet School is the best in Elmtown for any child who have interest in the dance. The author puts various achievements of the Ballet school as an evidence. However, the argument is based on various assumptions that need to be addressed.
Firstly, the author states that of all the dance school in Elmtown, Pirouettes Ballet School should be clear choice for any student. But the achievements stated in the argument are majority related to Ballet. It might be the case that the Pirouettes Ballet School is a good school for ballet but it is not a great school for other forms of dance. The author must present achievements of the school in other forms of dance as well.
Secondly, the author posits various achievements of the school but the author does not mention about any specific details that would support its claim. The author mentions that its school has most intensive program but in the author does not give any specifics to how their program is intensive. The author does not mention any data that would compare its program with other schools in Elmtown.
Finally, the authors states that many of its teacher who have danced in most prestigious ballet companies all over the world and its students have gone to become professional dancers with top dance companies. However, the author does not mention any specific number of student and the teachers who have danced with top companies. It might be the case that out of many student of Elmtown only few students as compared to the all the students have been danced with top companies and most of the students and teachers haven't. It is also a possibility that the students and its teachers have danced with top companies before joining Pirouettes Ballet School.
To sum up, the author posits various facts to state that Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child but miss many details which needs to be addressed.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 331 350
No. of Characters: 1568 1500
No. of Different Words: 123 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.265 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.737 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.349 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.643 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.573 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.449 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.691 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.184 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 364, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun student seems to be countable; consider using: 'many students'.
Suggestion: many students
...anies. It might be the case that out of many student of Elmtown only few students as compare...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 516, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...s and most of the students and teachers havent. It is also a possibility that the stud...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 330.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87878787879 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41403152617 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 204.123752495 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.375757575758 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 471.6 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0466394762 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.333333333 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73333333333 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.503432319485 0.218282227539 231% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.201380391923 0.0743258471296 271% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126556946033 0.0701772020484 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284649873196 0.128457276422 222% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109807832687 0.0628817314937 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.3550499002 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 98.500998004 50% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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