Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don’t.
Discuss both view and give own opinion.
Numerous individuals contemplate that professional athletes become positive role models for youths, nevertheless, others consider otherwise. In accordance with this statement, this essay will explain both points of view and also put forward my perspective in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the persons, who believed that the existence of experienced athletes is capable of being a role model to the youngster, recognised that professional athletes will render more fruitful values to young individuals. According to that, there are several contributing factors of it. The presence of media, first and foremost, used to show the positive activities of athletes. Second but not less crucial, it is apparent that the income which athletes obtained, additionally, is capable of inspiring the youth to work hard as their idol do in order to acquire the similar enormous intake. Therefore, these people feel that these two causes, ultimately, will inspire the youth to do similar thing as their idol.
In contrast, the other people who withstand to the first assumption consider that it will merely create a negative impact to the youngsters due to the fact that it is caused by the lifestyles which usually athletes do. For instance, if the athletes used to do bad activities, it, definitely, is going to influence their fans, particularly the youth.
By way of conclusion, it seems to me that the presence of athletes is naturally going to bestow positive impacts to the young persons, it is just the matter of controlling adolescent behaviour not to do bad activities as their idol have done. Thus, in order to make youngster not to do the same bad things as their idol, all parents have to maintain and monitor their loved ones’ behaviour.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1479.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20774647887 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90411426886 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570422535211 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.7230459616 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.454545455 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8181818182 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.54545454545 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165789664604 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612100233218 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602097688242 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102742150005 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385304246011 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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