Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don’t.
Discuss both view and give own opinion.
It is argued that competent sport mans should be the great influencer for young generation than becoming the bad models. I agree that nowadays, professional athletes have positive effect on the successful future of teenagers. This essay will first discuss teens follow the achievement of sportsmen to develop themselves, secondly address a bad habit in sports followed by a reasonable conclusion.
On the one hand, successful professional athletes play an essential role in becoming presenters to bring the passion of sports for young generation. Success requires sportsmen a lot of determination, patience, and endurance to reach their peak of career that young people can learn a lot to devote themselves to follow their dream. I believe that sport men are good role models for the never-give-up spirit that people should imitate. Lionel Messi is an example of the best influencer for thousands of children pursuing football with intense passion.
On the other hand, some athletes get distraction from their career path by crime activities instead of practicing every day. Because of the high level of pressure in competition, many people use drugs as a way to free themselves from stress that they could not share with anyone else. However, I totally disagree with this illegal action, which would create negative effect for not only their bright future but also the belief of young generation in truthful sport. Many surveys show that a noticeable amount of sportsmen use doping for performance enhancement and to self-treat.
In conclusion, young people should model themselves on successful sportsmen to reach their goal. Athletes using drugs to get out of pressure seriously affect badly for a majority of young sports enthusiasts.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2019-05-18 | alifdores | 78 | view |
| 2019-02-13 | Thaihaaaaaaa | 78 | view |
- The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists traveling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. 84
- Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do you agree or disagree? 61
- In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? 67
- The graph shows the amount of junk food in Uk 56
- There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 209, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a majority of young sports enthusiasts.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, second, secondly, so, thus, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1474.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34057971014 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83662102149 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594202898551 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.8086600339 49.4020404114 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.384615385 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2307692308 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69230769231 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211431236968 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774007561632 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575954131858 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128648446711 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452845852448 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.