The quality of the product that we buy is very important. people tend to buy a product which has good quality. Some people think that most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are, others disagree. In my view, advertisements usually provide some conditions that products seem much better than they really are for two important reasons.
Firstly, advertisements usually exaggerate to show the quality of the products. Companies always use advertising to sell more, so they want to show that their products are best. they show some aspects and capabilities of the products which are not true. For example, a couple of weeks ago, I wanted to buy some toy for my nephew and searched through the internet. I saw some advertisements about a toy car that runs by remote control and it was so powerful and able to climb small rocks. So I bought it and gave to my nephew. After he opened it and try to play with, It is not able to move on the carpet. It just can move on very smooth surfaces. This experience taught me that, you might never trust advertisements easily because those usually exaggerate to show the quality of the products.
Secondly, advertisements mostly do not show the disadvantages of the products. Even though there were some important disadvantages, advertisements mostly do not show those. For instance, last month I tried to buy a new laptop with good performance and reasonable cost. so as you expected, I searched on the internet and find a new model with high performance and appropriate cost. When I delivered the laptop, I saw that the frame made from poor quality of plastic and the feature is very inappropriate. from this, I realized that when you want to buy a product, you must pay attention to all aspect of that product, because advertisements mostly do not show the disadvantages of the products.
In sum, I believe that most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are, not only advertisements usually exaggerate to show the quality of the products, but also advertisements mostly do not show disadvantages of the products. as a result, we all must pay so much attention, when we want to buy a product.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, really, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1816.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85561497326 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99301903508 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454545454545 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 565.2 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.2672548542 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4761904762 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8095238095 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09523809524 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.416067119345 0.236089414692 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127844671348 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.191937720701 0.0737576698707 260% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.336885443426 0.150856017488 223% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.22503217116 0.0645574589148 349% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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