GRE ISSUE: A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The education has always been a great issue around the world. though education agenda is different in every institution and officials, it divided into two types of teaching in planning the process of the teaching - curriculum. some institutions set the complete and packed plans to all students, while the others let students to take a choice what they want to do. but the thing is, though the same process for all student has some advantages in some sense, it entails lot more risks than the benefits.
Admittedly, the same curriculum can guarantee the equal opportunity of education for all students in the nation. Realistically, lot of students try their best to enter the good colleges, they need to compete with the others in order to get the limited spaces of the colleges. In this case, the students can compete more impartially when they compete with the same materials they have learned. For instance, a lot of asian countries uses the fixed curriculum before college. With this system, the college entrance can be decided with single exam or test, which means the students get equal opportunity of getting into a college with single exam.
However, the individual curriculum is still important considering the value of student itself. The fixed curriculum can harm student from finding their interest. As we as a human does not have same interest and same characters, the education should also need to be changed with the student. but in this fixed curriculum, the form and content of the education cannot be easily changed because of the size of students, which can take away for students to get the opportunity of fitting education. For example, a lot of student in asian countries again, when they get into a college, lot of student wants to change the major that they selected because they realized what they want to do after they got into a college!
Moreover, the fixed education system cannot change its color fast according to the changing society of technologies and cultures. Nowadays, the technologies have been improved fast and the society have been more diverse, and its speed is getting faster. in this case, the education need to be changed accordingly with the changing system, but uniform curriculum cannot change its process not that fast because of the size of the students that curriculum need to handle. For instance, as the fourth revolution getting high attention around the world, the education according to this revolution such as computer coding and algorithm is required in order to improve the competence of national tech. but in fixed curriculums, they still do not have the system set for teaching the coding.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, however, if, moreover, so, still, while, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2217.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 442.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01583710407 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64095811089 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432126696833 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 695.7 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 14.0 4.99550561798 280% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.0363341444 60.3974514979 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.166666667 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5555555556 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210602562451 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0750897145575 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424106573423 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137036263557 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536826779054 0.0667264976115 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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