TPO-28
Independent task
Development of education in the last decades is a well-known fact. Due to this improvement more attention has been paid to education and students status by society and parents. There are some people who believe that parents involvement in their children’s education is as well as the past. As far, in my point of view about today education I believe that nowadays parents have more involvement in their children’s education than past. This is going to be clearly discussed by two reasons in the following paragraphs.
To commence, as mentioned in last decade education have had an increasing process consequently, the amount of educated people has growth, too. Therefore, the amount of educated parents who know about the education process and are familiar with lessons is more than past. As a result, they know how to help their children in their education process thus, their engagement in children’s education is enhance. For example, my grandfather knew about the importance of education and he always encouraged his children to study hard. However, he did not have academic education hence he could not involve in his children education as my father has now. This example clearly illustrates the parent’s involvement increase than past.
Another reason which should be noticed, is the industrial’s equipment development in recent centuries as a result the requirement of worker is decreased instead the demand of educated and accomplished people for designing or work with equipments is rise. Accordingly, the importance of education enhanced than past hence parents feel more worry about children’s future and they focus on their education more than past. For instance, in past the products were wrapped by hand but nowadays engineerings design machines that wrapped thus opportunity for finding the job decreased and only skillful person can find suitable job.
As a conclusion. I am personally agreeing with the growth of parent’s engagement in children’s education than past. To recapitulate the reasons, not only this enhancement will result in growth the amount of the educated parents, but also, the parent’s worrier for their children’s job future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 403, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'enhanced'.
Suggestion: enhanced
...agement in children's education is enhance. For example, my grandfather knew about...
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Line 3, column 635, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... skillful person can find suitable job. As a conclusion. I am personally agreeing ...
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Line 4, column 19, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... find suitable job. As a conclusion. I am personally agreeing with the growth of parent's engage...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, hence, however, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 8.0752688172 396% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46355685131 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20919087436 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492711370262 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5553907276 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.235294118 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1764705882 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.70588235294 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.