When we are young, we live with our parents until we reach the time that we must decide whether to follow our own path or stay at home. However, making that decision is tough, because you do not know if you will make it by your own. Young adults sometimes prefer to stay in their comfort zone and never face real life. They try to live as long as possible with their families. I cannot imagine myself doing that. I support the idea that we need to go out and explore the world as soon as we can; If you are not ready yet, this can be done by studying abroad. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Experiencing independence for the first time gives you a tremendous feeling of freedom. This can be done by doing an exchange student program, for instance, when you are at high school and cannot leave your house yet. I had this opportunity when I was eighteen years old and I got to go to the USA. I was living on my own and I have never felt so good in my life. At my home in Brazil, I had always to tell my parents where I would go, what I would be doing at my friends etc. On the contrary, when I was by myself, I did not have to do any of that. I felt that I had the liberty to do anything that I wanted to.
Living on your own and being independence from your parents, gives you the chance to learn several new skills. Usually when we are at our houses living with our folks, they often do a myriad of things for us. My mom for example, she would do my laundry, make me supper, lunch and many other home shores. She would not let me do anything. Meanwhile, when I was living in the United States, I had to do everything that my mother would do it for me when I was in Brazil. I learned several new skills, cooking, doing laundry, cleaning, fixing the house, and learning how to kill unpleasant bugs. If I had never lived on my own, I would have never learned these skills.
Getting your independence from your parents is an important step that many of us should do it. If you do not have the resources yet to get out of your home, a studying abroad program can give you the taste of independence. Living on your own gives you the feeling of freedom and the opportunity to learn a myriad of new skills.
- Children over the age of 15 should be allowed to vote. 70
- Businesses should hire employees for their entire lives. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why? 70
- Financial plan 73
- Children over the age of 15 should be allowed to vote. 90
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 560, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t, this can be done by studying abroad. I feel this way for two reasons, which I ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, while, for example, for instance, i feel, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 90.0 43.0788530466 209% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.12954545455 4.8611393121 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26374474914 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468181818182 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.8440099611 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.7083333333 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.375 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229201126111 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0684174841955 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044357926414 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13970369636 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497787880741 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 11.7677419355 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 58.1214874552 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.67 10.9000537634 61% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.4 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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