SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's original headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
Supercorp's decision to get relocated from Middlesburg to Corporateville certainly invlolves a lot of assumptions.
The company's outlook that an increase in the number of homeowners in Corporateville making it a superior place to live, is ambiguous. Besides this factor, there are thousands of other factors like urban population, business, commerce, reachability of a place, oppotunities in an area, medical facilites, that make a place superior. An increase in the number of home owners can be subjected to the less taxes in that area, it certainly doesn't make that place superior. Relocating on just one factor, is full of uncertainties.
Supercorp has conducted an employee survey and found out that it's current workforce doesn't prefer to live in an urban area. Firstly, it's not certain that all the employees participated in that survey. Secondly, it did not take into account the possible choice of the future generation employees. There is a huge chance, that ten years down the line, it's prospective workforce doesn't even want to live in an area which is not urban. The younger generation prefers a place which is vivacious and energetic, with full of night life, fine dinings and movie theatres. All these things are more liable to be in an urban area. Taking a step to relocate, on the basis of an employee survey, is not that judicious.
The company's assumption that Corporateville has low taxes, hence making it a safer place, is naive. The enforcement of law and order, an effective judiciary and police forces of an area, make a place safer rather than low taxes. Take an instance of a countryside, the taxes are less there since there are not many facilities which are provided by the local administrative body, it certainly, doesn't make countryside more safer than an urban area.
The above stated assumptions clearly reflect that the decision of Supercop to relocate from Middlesburg to Corporateville, was not a well rounded and certainly, not it's best decision.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK. This survey is only about workers where to live, not about where to work.
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 330 350
No. of Characters: 1614 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.262 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.891 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.902 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.339 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.312 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.582 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.066 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: doesn't
...e less taxes in that area, it certainly doesnt make that place superior. Relocating on...
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Suggestion: doesn't
...nd found out that its current workforce doesnt prefer to live in an urban area. Firstl...
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Suggestion: doesn't
...own the line, its prospective workforce doesnt even want to live in an area which is n...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ocal administrative body, it certainly, doesnt make countryside more safer than an urb...
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Line 7, column 417, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'safer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: safer
..., it certainly, doesnt make countryside more safer than an urban area. The above state...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, hence, if, look, second, secondly, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.9520958084 8% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 326.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11042944785 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9922051116 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521472392638 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0818699701 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.125 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.375 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167581000532 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618713301612 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062867791676 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104246243275 0.128457276422 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455257988611 0.0628817314937 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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