Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?
In recent years, the violence was being developed among people, especially between young and teenager population. The violence appears in the human beings behaviour by a lot of reasons. A group of people believe that television and computer games are one of the most important factors for deploying the violence. Another group denied this idea and think on opposite way. In this essay, I would argue about destroying affects of T.V. and video games on the society and give some examples about that.
By and large, the first influence that be effects on people by T.V. and computer games is increasing unclearly between virtual and real words. For instance, death is a simple fact in computer games or movies, but it is a painfull event in real word. Although some groups of people try to teach and send alerts in society, but the significant number of teenagers behave violencly. For the second reason, I can mentioned to be went down the correct social aspects among kids, adults, and even aged people. it is clear that the proportion of farious communication was be rose in all the countries. I belives that the main cause of angryfull behaviours is video games like Combat, GTA, and Call of Duty.
The last dangerous damage is decreasing phisical activities. this is a strong evidence that traditional, phisical games be replaced by modern games in the computers and smartphones. this is harmfull for mental thinks of children and is a cause of violence.
To conclusion, in my opinion T.V. and computer game are two dangerious tools for developing violence in the society. They are harmfull and a serious tread for people, especially kids and young population.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, for instance, by and large, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1387.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95357142857 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67775940072 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564285714286 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 0.809619238477 865% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.7071852796 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.6875 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3125 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253395274952 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753998190942 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726068615059 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140566396316 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048284838697 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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